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    • rcartwright
      rcartwright last edited by

      I would put the reader in the middle as a way of saying tech is encroaching on society

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      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by

        I like #2 as well, and agree that putting her in the middle might make this a stronger piece.

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        • Jason Bowen
          Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

          Thanks for helping. I have made some changes too which definitely improve things 🙂

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          • mungoline
            mungoline last edited by

            @jason-bowen i like this one and looking forward to The final 😉

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            • Charlie Eve Ryan
              Charlie Eve Ryan Pro SVS OG @Jason Bowen last edited by

              @jason-bowen Awesome! Maybe push the size a bit more on the big muscle guy on the end. That's funny!

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              • Jason Bowen
                Jason Bowen SVS OG @Charlie Eve Ryan last edited by

                @charlie-eve-ryan He does keep growing each time I draw, I will try making him a little bigger, thanks.

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                • Jason Bowen
                  Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

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                  Started work on the details of the OLD and New Painting... Going to try and make my pictures look more friendly after a little self evaluation on my work. Lots to do but I like it so far.

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                  • Johanna Kim
                    Johanna Kim SVS OG @Jason Bowen last edited by

                    @jason-bowen Great concept! I like how you moved the book reader to the center. Right now, the big guy on the right is drawing too much of my attention, even though his colors are muted compared to the book lady. Perhaps because he's also the same height as the lady's hair? Playing more with scale might help--i.e., making him the same height as his neighbor, but keeping his width.

                    Also, I wonder if there's a way to have the characters interacting more--for example, the book lady can be reading to the boy beside her, and the little girl with the device could be sneaking a peak. The big guy could be talking to his phone on a video call, or playing a video game, while the mistachio-man can be glaring at him with annoyance. I can't wait to see how this develops!

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                    • Jason Bowen
                      Jason Bowen SVS OG @Johanna Kim last edited by

                      @johanna-kim Some great thoughts thanks. I will play with sizes again I didn't notice the size caparison with the big guy and the womans hair... hmmm... I will have to play with this scene a little more. 🙂

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                      • Eli
                        Eli last edited by

                        Hi Jason--Maybe this won't be an issue when you add more color, but right now I'm having a tough time with the mustache guy's face. The color is the same (almost) as the detail behind him on the window, and it's making it a little murky to read. I guess it's a similar issue with his hair--that blends into the background a lot. Maybe you can just lighten the area behind him and move or lighten the window detail...? Or you could lighten his hair and mustache. Hope that makes sense! It's really coming along! I like the kid next to her peeking at her book, and love the expression on the big guy's face.

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                        • Jason Bowen
                          Jason Bowen SVS OG @Eli last edited by

                          @eli thanks for your thoughts, things have developed a bit more, still a lot more thinking to do though but I am staring to see a finish line on this. 🙂0_1521134288609_old and new.jpg

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                          • Eli
                            Eli last edited by

                            WOW it's looking awesome!!

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                            • Jason Bowen
                              Jason Bowen SVS OG @Eli last edited by

                              @eli thanks 🙂

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                              • Jason Bowen
                                Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

                                0_1521747489245_old and new new.jpg Spent more time on this painting. It's coming along but any thoughts still welcome 🙂

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                                • Lee White
                                  Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                  HI Jason, characters are looking good and this is a fun concept. While I do like the concept, I feel like it might not be taken as far as it can go. You have all the ingredients here, just need to play more in the beginning stages (in my opinion).

                                  Is this the best composition possible for this story? Have you used good shapes and design to your advantage? Would there be a benefit to having a foreground middle ground and background? Could perspective and overlap help? What about camera angle? How about a framing device? Etc. These are things I play with in the thumbnail stage and really try to make sure I can answer yest to those questions before refining the paint.

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                                  • Jason Bowen
                                    Jason Bowen SVS OG @Lee White last edited by

                                    @lee-white thanks for your opinion. I will try and push my compositions further. Still happy with what I have here though. Making progress 🙂

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