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    • Jon Anderson
      Jon Anderson SVS OG @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

      @gary-wilkinson I gotta go with @Lee-White on this one. I thought the idea was strong the first time around but after seeing your new comp and moving the camera I'm totally sold on it. I don't know how to explain it other than that the new layout feels like I'm immersed in that world instead of looking through a window.

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      • Jason Bowen
        Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

        I really like the bear in the first one and the ps2, good memories :)... I think the first one looks like it would make a cool animation. the second one looks like you could play with the boys expression more.

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        • Sarah LuAnn
          Sarah LuAnn SVS OG last edited by

          I like the strong silhouette in the first, I feel like the gesture of the bear was a much quicker read as well as the hunched-over-the-phone posture. The new one does have a lot more depth to it though, and you feel the distance to the bear and other old toys. Really, you could go either way. (Though the judge of the contest has spoken, so if winning is your aim thats not something to ignore...;-) )

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          • nasvikdraws
            nasvikdraws @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

            @gary-wilkinson Like the new angle. Do you think it looks good if you mirror the boy so he is looking at the other direction, away from the bear?

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            • Gary Wilkinson
              Gary Wilkinson last edited by

              Just got back into this piece. @Lee-White I'm not 100% sure which one I like to be honest. As others mentioned, I do like the silhouette of the bear in the first style, but I like the the depth and energy of the second angle. I think I will go with the 2nd style though as it feels like it is more of a storytelling piece.

              @nasvikdraws I flipped the boy, although im not sure if it now reads more that he is simply abandoning the toys, whereas the other direction could be seen as he isn't paying them any attention at all. Which direction do you think fits better?

              I am thinking of how to do the background and i'm probably going to do a faded out street scene with other trashcans scattered about. I was also thinking whether to add a garbage truck parked next to the bin but it might make it a little too busy.

              Probably going to use what I have as the base for the drawing and redraw it to fix certain issues. Not giving up on this one 😛

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              • Gary Wilkinson
                Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                Flipped the boy, returned his headphones and started work on lighting the scene. Also added a giraffe to keep the toys r us reference as part of the piece, still quite a lot to work on and I think I can get away with over exposing the background so I don't have to paint it with much detail 😛

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                • Jason Bowen
                  Jason Bowen SVS OG @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                  @gary-wilkinson That looks great!

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                  • BichonBistro
                    BichonBistro @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                    @gary-wilkinson wow, love this

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                    • nasvikdraws
                      nasvikdraws @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                      @gary-wilkinson I see what you mean. This does read better. 😉 Looks great

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                      • Zavellart
                        Zavellart last edited by

                        Oh I love this concept. I wonder if Toy Story 4 will use a theme like this.

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                        • QuietYell
                          QuietYell SVS OG last edited by

                          @Gary-Wilkinson Looking great! Even more rich & immersive now! Gives tangibility to & personal association with the story/emotions.

                          BTW, Sorry I've been silent & haven't responded - Been on ultra-go-mode these couple weeks, but everyone has added awesome comments (as usual!!!). Excited to see this one continue to finish out!

                          Also, not that you need it, but if you want one more small concept element, there is news that KBToys is seeking to fill the void of ToysRUs in some way. They have a little soldier/drummerboy that could be starting to run after the boy.

                          https://www.linkedin.com/pulse/kb-toys-coming-back-wow-what-response-from-toy-industry-ellia-kassoff/

                          http://money.cnn.com/2018/03/20/news/companies/kb-toys-toys-r-us/index.html

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                          • Gary Wilkinson
                            Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                            Thanks for all your comments, still trying to find the time to get it done, but slowly working on it and learning how to overcome certain challenges. Started laying out the colors and I think I am going to have the background filled with a silhouette of trash hinting at the discarded toys of old. Lot's of work left to do on it, but I'm happy that @Lee-White recommended changing the angle of the scene. Although it's a more challenging scene I have grown to like it more and I think it will be a good image for my portfolio when/if it's done.

                            The things I feel I still need to do for this piece are to adjust and add more toys in front of the trash can, finish the sky and detailing the bear to give him a little more punch. A few things i'm a little stuck up on are the color of the sky and how to paint the boy. My first painting of the sky had it quite blue, but I pulled it more to grey to create a more sombre mood, I'm wondering whether to bring the blues back out and also whether I should add clouds. I am also going to revert the boy back a little more towards the earlier rendering to adjust his expression, and to fix the color and light on his face which I think I took too far as well as fixing his hair. I really want the eye to be pulled towards the abandoned toys and for the composition to flow well based on the lighting and position of the objects.

                            Let me know if anything jumps out to you that you feel is wrong or should be added/taken away 🙂

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                            • Chip Valecek
                              Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                              @gary-wilkinson I wouldn't add any clouds into the sky, I think the characters pop on the sky as is. I prefer more of the blue into the sky. The only thing that stands out for me is it looks as if the boys eyes are closed vs looking down at the phone. Maybe having them just crack open a little? Other then that, its game over you got this one. Great piece!


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                              • djlambson
                                djlambson last edited by

                                I really like this..so well done. I think your instincts are right regarding the lighting a wee bit overdone on the lads face. Was perfect in my humble opinion top frame...and it does succeed in pulling your eye back to the abandoned toys, whereas the added blue light draws more attention to that area.

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                                • rcartwright
                                  rcartwright last edited by

                                  This is really nice, one thing in the background I find the mailbox distracting and seems to be taking away from the nice negative shape of the sky.

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                                  • Eli
                                    Eli @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                                    @gary-wilkinson This is looking just amazing. It has such a strong emotional content. I can see how it would be cool to have a bunch more discarded toys, but i also just like the simplicity of what you have here. It has an intimacy that is really nice, and it reads so well. That's a tough one.

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                                    • Jason Bowen
                                      Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

                                      I think i would have the boy looking into the corner of his eye towards the toys to connect them. Looks awesome though, just a thought.

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                                        MOO SVS OG @stringfellowart last edited by

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