Travel Wip - Critiques welcome

[Jason Bowen]

Still working on this... added some colour now and some creatures below the vines. I am going to experiment more with them because I want to create an element of danger, and the reason why they fly out of the castle and not walk... Lots to do but enjoying myself.

[Lee White]

I am stopping myself from commenting specifically on people's work for the contest since i'm the judge, but I would like to offer some general questions to ask.

1. Is the composition working as well as it could and is there any dead space you need to resolve?
2. Is the angle you drew this at the best one to convey the story?
3. Do you have a keyword the viewer should feel and is it working as well as it can to achieve that goal?
4. Have you explored multiple options for this and posted them so you can see what people respond to and which one might work best?

If you can confidently answer those questions, then you should be fine. If not, might need to rework some parts. : )

Cheers,
Lee

[Jason Bowen]

@lee-white Thanks for the checklist. My head hurts from doing different angles now though haha. I think doing the same scene at different view points will definitely improve my drawing though

[Joy Heyer]

I would love to see a handful of different thumbnails to choose from! And if you let us know what feeling you are going for (a "keyword") we can help vote on which thumbnail is best for what you are wanting. I love the fantasy concept!

[Jason Bowen]

Here are my test comps... which one do you prefer?

[RHirsch]

@jason-bowen While I think your compositions are lovely, I'm not sure I'm reading "travel" from them. That could be because you haven't gotten into the details yet, but if you could share with me what your vision is for the theme I'll be able to follow it better. The winged thing looks like it could be seriously cool...

[Jason Bowen]

@rhirsch I have gone for a location which is hard to travel too but once there it is a safe place which holds answers to life's mysteries.

[Joy Heyer]

Based on your vision for this piece, I like the thumbnail #6....though I think it needs some tweaking. I feel the character(s) in the foreground looking at the far-away safe place matches your intent the best.

[Jason Bowen]

My idea has changed a lot haha... needs a lot more work but I am having more fun with this one

[rcartwright]

If you look at your image everything important is happening on one side and it all appears to be in the mid ground. I would consider moving hatched egg to the left corner area a some how and making it larger move it to the right corner and make it larger then crop your image and reverse it so it reads left to right. Just a thought.

[Jason Bowen]

@rcartwright Yeah your right, I should have mentioned I am adding dinosaurs into the landscape too.

[Jason Bowen]

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[Jason Bowen]

I'm going to say this done now. I need to learn more so going to watch some videos and re-calibrate myself lol.