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    Travel idea - critiques appreciated

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    • Jason Bowen
      Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

      The pregnant woman looks well drawn but I'm not sure what the concept is?

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      • juliepeelart
        juliepeelart SVS OG last edited by

        The lady is well done! To me it looks like she is pulling the window shut. The faces in the window don't seem too friendly. So maybe she is shutting out all of those things?

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        • KathrynAdebayo
          KathrynAdebayo last edited by

          @juliepeelart @Jason-Bowen
          Thanks so much for offering thoughts. 🙂 I'll try again at the concept to try to make it more clear.

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          • Kevin Longueil
            Kevin Longueil SVS OG @KathrynAdebayo last edited by

            @kathrynadebayo I think it is very clear....or i am just wrong:) she is "nesting" and shutting out the world - i like it

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            • KathrynAdebayo
              KathrynAdebayo @Kevin Longueil last edited by

              @kevin-longueil Totally got it. 🙂 I think the travel theme doesn't come through as well as I'd like though, so for the sake of the monthly challenge, I'll still try to rework this. Maybe they can be two separate pieces. Would love any ideas you or anyone else may have.

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              • Jon Anderson
                Jon Anderson SVS OG @KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                @kathrynadebayo You have a nice concept but I'm not sure if trying to make it fit the travel them is best for it. I, too, had an idea I was set on making fit the theme but my wife kindly informed me that it didn't so I had to go back to the drawing board. Maybe you could make something with getting the hospital bag ready fit the travel theme?

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                • KathrynAdebayo
                  KathrynAdebayo @Jon Anderson last edited by

                  @jon-anderson

                  Thank you so much, Jon. I think you're completely right. I was trying to think of something to do with the journey of the baby into this world, but the sketch just didn't hit the mark.

                  Here's another idea. (sorry for the messy, literal cut and paste effect here) If it seems more in line with the topic, would anyone have some composition advice for me?

                  Grateful for all the feedback so far.

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                  • AirenHall
                    AirenHall @KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                    @kathrynadebayo

                    I love the image of the pregnant woman stepping onto the boat and I think that definitely conveys the sense of the journey ahead for her and the baby. I am not sure the image of the kid by the river is necessary? Just my opinion.

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                    • Sarah LuAnn
                      Sarah LuAnn SVS OG last edited by

                      Is the second figure the baby’s dad waiting to welcome baby into the world? That was my first thought but I’m not sure... 🤔

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                      • KathrynAdebayo
                        KathrynAdebayo @Sarah LuAnn last edited by

                        @AirenHall @sarah-luann

                        Thank you both for your feedback! I was going for it being the father figure, but it's probably best not to have any confusion... I kind of like the idea of simplifying the image and just making it be the lady and the boat. Maybe I was overthinking things! 🙂 Thanks again...

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