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    • Naters.Art
      Naters.Art @rachy last edited by

      @rachy this one is one of my favorite layouts. It has a lot of movement. I also like how it shows the hole figure of the piper.
      0_1534814826245_1534795860951-img_20180820_203637-resized.jpg

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      • SarahLuAnn
        SarahLuAnn last edited by

        I agree with Naters... there is more flow in that one.

        sarahluann.com

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        • rachy
          rachy @Naters.Art last edited by

          @naters-calderone I nearly picked that one but I didn't go for it as I thought it was too obvious... hmm now you've got me questioning myself whether I should have a play with that one instead!

          Rachel
          www.ethereal-earth.co.uk
          https://twitter.com/racheblackwell

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          • TessaW
            TessaW last edited by TessaW

            I think that other thumbnail would be at least worth trying out!

            As for the background buildings. Here is another option: Just playing with the perspective a bit, as you've already played with perspective and the size relationship between the rats and the piper.

            0_1534875886839_rachy.jpg

            Hopefully you can see past my terrible paintover, to see what I'm trying to indicate. This variation has more of an implication that they are going somewhere. The path leads out of the scene. To sell the point even further, you could have the buildings stop and show the path leading down to a patch of country side in that top right corner. I think this is what @Heather-Boyd was suggesting?

            Just a thought. I think that a blank background could potentially work well as well as the buildings you currently have. Just throwing in another option.

            Great job so far! Loving those rats. They are super cute.

            Website: www.tessawrathall.com

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            • rachy
              rachy @TessaW last edited by

              @tessaw
              Thank you so much for the paint over! Aah I really like that perspective of the road and some countryside at the end of it is such a good idea too! Somehow it's given me an idea of how to polish up the piper a bit too! Guess what I'm gonna be working on this evening!
              Thanks again!
              Xx

              Rachel
              www.ethereal-earth.co.uk
              https://twitter.com/racheblackwell

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              • rachy
                rachy last edited by

                Thanks so much for the help & feedback all! Here's how its looking after this evenings drawing time...
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                Rachel
                www.ethereal-earth.co.uk
                https://twitter.com/racheblackwell

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                  Simon Prime @rachy last edited by

                  @rachy I like the feeling of the rats concentrating on the piper. You're successfully communicating the mesmeric quality of the piper's music.

                  I'm not really getting consistent size cues from the rats. For example, the rat on the right sticking its head out of a window is behind the piper yet seems to be the size of a dog. The rat across the road seems as big as a person. The background rats make the foreground rats look like huge rats close to the piper rather than regular size rats close to the camera.

                  As the rats are such an important part of the image, I'd suggest some more character development sketches of the rats starting with some studies of reference photos. This would help to flesh them out a bit, make them pop.

                  Nice job!

                  Simon Lissaman
                  https://www.artstation.com/simon-prime

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                  • rachy
                    rachy @Simon Prime last edited by rachy

                    Thank you @Simon-Prime ! I'll do some rat studies this evening and see what I can do. I do want the rats to look larger than life, as i thought it would be fun if the town was over-run with giant rats. I did mean to do dog size rather than human tho!

                    Rachel
                    www.ethereal-earth.co.uk
                    https://twitter.com/racheblackwell

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                    • rachy
                      rachy last edited by

                      Wow this is so good getting feedback! Bit worried I'm not going to get this painted in time for the contest tho!

                      Rachel
                      www.ethereal-earth.co.uk
                      https://twitter.com/racheblackwell

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                      • Naters.Art
                        Naters.Art @rachy last edited by

                        @rachy "perfection is the enemy of progress"

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                        • braden H
                          braden H last edited by

                          Very nice! This has improved so much since the last time I saw it 🙂

                          As for finishing on time, do what you can. Finished, not perfect, right?

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                          • rachy
                            rachy @Naters.Art last edited by rachy

                            @naters-calderone Perfectly imperfect

                            Rachel
                            www.ethereal-earth.co.uk
                            https://twitter.com/racheblackwell

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                            • rachy
                              rachy @braden H last edited by

                              @art-of-b

                              Thank you 🙂 it's coming along. Yes yes yes finished not perfect!

                              Rachel
                              www.ethereal-earth.co.uk
                              https://twitter.com/racheblackwell

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                              • rachy
                                rachy last edited by

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                                Nearly there! Xx

                                Rachel
                                www.ethereal-earth.co.uk
                                https://twitter.com/racheblackwell

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                                • TessaW
                                  TessaW last edited by

                                  Sweeeet.

                                  Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                                  Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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