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    My first digital illustration. Critiques invited!

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    • TessaW
      TessaW last edited by

      I also agree with the advice given so far. A few more things to add:

      1. It looks like you aren't quite comfortable with showing heads at angles other than straight toward the viewer. You tilt the head, but you don't rotate the head if that makes sense. All of the cat's heads are more or less straight toward the viewer and all of the cat's heads are tilted to the left. It's not super obvious, but I find this pattern to be just a little uneasy. The kitty's head in the center does look like it's turned a bit, but her ears are depicted as straight toward the viewer.

      2. A big part of this piece seems to be about enjoying the process of being together and making food together. I think that showing more of the table top might work well for this concept.

      3. I'd recommend curving the mom's dress downward instead of upward. I feel the current curve is drawing too much attention to a non focal point area.

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      That stuff out of the way, man oh man, you did a great job! I am seriously impressed that this is your first digital illustration. While you can still tell it's digital, it's very close to looking traditional. Your traditional work must be very strong. You are going to make some beautiful pieces in digital in the future if you keep up with it.

      Website: www.tessawrathall.com

      Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by

        Ok just reread your first post. This is your first illustration with a background? I'm even more impressed. 🙀

        Website: www.tessawrathall.com

        Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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          JennyJones @Miriam last edited by

          @miriam Thank you for looking and for feedback. This is my first time putting anything "out there" to have anyone say stuff about it. I looked at this piece as I worked on it for many many hours and I never saw the window thing. And there it is!! I agree with your observation about the floor too. It always bugged me but I did not know why. Thank you for the kind word too!

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            JennyJones @TessaW last edited by

            @tessaw Yes. Thank you for your feedback and your compliments. You are very encouraging. I can't say my traditional stuff is super strong yet, but I am working. I really put time and effort into illustration and children's book stuff about 20 years ago. But then life happened and I lost my way. Now I am back and really trying again. The whole digital thing really took off while I was "away" and I feel like I am trying to catch up. I have been doing digital painting since around July when I got an ipad for my 43rd birthday. I am telling myself that there is not a limit on when you BEGIN but just get in there and do it. ( The pod cast and SVS has been so encouraging in that way) Digital sure takes a heck of a lot longer!!! For me anyway. And right now until I am more comfortable, I guess.

            Thank you for your critiques. They are helpful. I think I will take everyone's advice and work it up a little more and come back with a refined image.

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              JennyJones @TessaW last edited by

              @tessaw Thanks. I have about 5 spots done digitally and then this piece. I am working on a little joke book. So my other illustrations are little and not any real backgrounds except one that's in process. Backgrounds sure do up the difficulty factor! Everyone is so encouraging! I wish I could skip the day job today and do illustration! I have been following the forum for several months now and have seen yours and others stuff. I am equally impressed and happy that I can participate in a community of fellow artists. I look forward to participating more.

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              • Christine Garner
                Christine Garner last edited by

                Lovely picture, I like the mood and composition. Keep going with the digital painting it is a really awesome tool in your belt 🙂

                website: https://thimblefolio.com

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                  JennyJones @Christine Garner last edited by

                  @christine-garner Thank you.

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                  • robgale
                    robgale @JennyJones last edited by

                    @jennyjones Perspective IS really painful! If you're doing it all digitally, one thing that can help is setting up a perspective grid to use as a guide. I like to do my sketching first to get the basic layout and composition, then lay down a grid and tweak things around a bit to fix the perspective.

                    Rob Gale
                    instagram: www.instagram.com/robgalestudio/
                    website: www.robgaleillustration.com

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                      JennyJones @robgale last edited by

                      @robgale I use Procreate and I know there is an assist option. I just couldn't find it. I need to make use of the tools for sure. Next time...

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                        JennyJones last edited by

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                        Ok so I took all the advice and added a few things from my own critiques and reworked the illustration. I like it SO much better. Took a while. You will never know how many re-draws of the mom cat and middle cat were done! Whew!!

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                        • MOO
                          MOO SVS OG last edited by

                          So cute! It reminds me of a little golden book we had about The Three Little Kittens 🙂 I don't do digital yet so I can't say anymore 🙂

                          Marsha Ottum Owen

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                          • TessaW
                            TessaW last edited by

                            Beautiful! I love it. 🙂 The littlest kitty's feet are a nice touch.

                            Website: www.tessawrathall.com

                            Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

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                            • Eli
                              Eli @JennyJones last edited by

                              @jennyjones WOW this looks fantastic!!

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                                JennyJones @MOO last edited by

                                @marsha-kay-ottum-owen Thank you. I loved that book when I was little. I will have to go back and look to see if I was unconsciously influenced. One of my current loves are the illustrations of Anita Jeram. She makes the sweetest little animals!

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                                  JennyJones @TessaW last edited by

                                  @tessaw Thanks! I am learning a lot reworking things. I went back to a couple of spots I did a few weeks ago and touched them up too. I know Jake's words "finished, not perfect" and that I have to let them go and move forward. But these were not finished for too long...

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                                    JennyJones @Eli last edited by

                                    @eli Thank you. You guys are so encouraging. I am feeling empowered to keep it up.

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