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    • rcartwright
      rcartwright @amandar last edited by

      @amandar Welcome to the forum. Your image is cute and it works overall. It does seem like you have two different styles in the same image. The other thing is the greenery looks like it was done with stamp brushes

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      • MikeCañas
        MikeCañas @amandar last edited by

        @amandar
        I think your image is great in communicating the prompt you gave. You could clump the leaves in the foreground together a little more. Having a few leaves and stems showing here and there along with areas that are clumped or closer together would make it easier for the eye to keep moving through the picture. Also, the tree’s face could be illuminated a little more using slightly brighter values to accentuate its shape. Right now, it’s values are too close to the surrounding vegetation making it a bit flat and making it tougher to read. Also, it’s a bit unclear what you want your light source to be. I’m guessing it’s the ghosts but I also noticed you had a sunbeam coming from left to right. Clearing up what your main light source would help as well. I hope I was able to help!

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        • ?
          A Former User last edited by

          Welcome to the forum! Really like your little ghosts and the simple style you have, have you thought about losing the outlines from the tree stump? Everything else in your illustration doesn't have outlines and works wonderfully, but the tree stump stands out to me as it looks like it's in a different style and it's quite jarring. Also, maybe the leaves in the foreground could be different shapes instead of just using the one shape? And maybe the little ghosts could have very subtle rosy cheeks to bring a bit of warmth to the image?
          Just thoughts anyway, look forward to seeing more of your work!

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          • NelliA
            NelliA last edited by

            Hey Amanda! I really like this, especially the little ghosts. I agree with previous commenters about there being 2 styles. But that should be easy enough to fix, just softening up the tree stump. I really like the colors of the background and ghost, maybe break up the brown a little bit, so it fits in better? But great job, this is gonna turn out great! 🙂 -N

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            • Gary Wilkinson
              Gary Wilkinson last edited by

              Hi Amandar and welcome to the forums!

              The story concept for your piece is so great and I like how you have interpreted it. If possible I would like to see more of a connection between the spirits and the tree and they don't feel like the same entity. Also, the lighting in your scene is a little confusing especially with your mixture of styles (although the mix isn't a big issue to me if that's what you want your style to be).

              If you balance out your light and shadow a bit better and maybe bump up the sun rays I think it will grow into a great piece.

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              • amandar
                amandar @rcartwright last edited by

                @rcartwright Thanks for the feedback! I'm really glad that the story came through and the image works. 🙂

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                • amandar
                  amandar @MikeCañas last edited by

                  @mikecañas Thanks for the feedback! I agree with your comments on lighting, that's something I need to work on. When I get some time, I'll go into the original and try to add some more contrast and clean up the lighting. 🙂

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                  • amandar
                    amandar @Guest last edited by

                    @hannahmccaffery Thanks for your feedback! I was aiming to add emphasis to the stump with the extra detail, although I might have gone a bit overboard.

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                    • amandar
                      amandar @Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                      @gary-wilkinson Thanks for the feedback! I definitely need to work on my lighting skills... I'm seeing a lot of comments re: a mix of styles, and I understand that might not always work, I'm also not sure if it's something I want to worry about. I've struggled with "what is my style?", trying all sort of different styles and approaches, but I think this might be my style. That doesn't mean that I shouldn't work to refine it though. 🙂

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                      • amandar
                        amandar last edited by

                        1. Magic

                        All night the fairies dance, leaving almost no trace when the morning comes. That is, except for a magical circle of small mushrooms. .

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                        • StudioLooong
                          StudioLooong last edited by

                          Hey @amandar nice work! I'm doing folktale week too!

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                          • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                            Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                            I like you concept here. It’s a nice way to show rebirth. I don’t think i’ve seen the topic handled this way before. Also your piece also falls perfectly to one of the folktale week’s prompt: into the forest.

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                            • Sophie Lawson
                              Sophie Lawson @amandar last edited by

                              @amandar I flipping love this Amandar.

                              The first one has such a friendly, huggable feel to it. I'd like to see what else these lil spirits get up to 🙂

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                              • Feleri
                                Feleri last edited by

                                Hi Amandar!
                                Welcome to the forum, this is a lovely piece!
                                I love the bark texture and the trunk's expression. 🙂

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