Society of Visual Storytelling

    SVSLearn Forums

    • Register
    • Login
    • Search
    • Recent
    • Tags
    • Popular
    • Users
    • Groups
    • Search

    BIG - WIP (need help with values)

    Artwork
    11
    15
    899
    Loading More Posts
    • Oldest to Newest
    • Newest to Oldest
    • Most Votes
    Reply
    • Reply as topic
    Log in to reply
    This topic has been deleted. Only users with topic management privileges can see it.
    • Laurel Aylesworth
      Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

      Hi all. It's been a while since I've attempted one of the monthly contests, so here goes. This is my rough sketch. I'm wondering if the values "read" well enough. Any thoughts welcome. Thank you!0_1547580259518_fish.jpg

      www.laurelaylesworth.com
      instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

      Chip Valecek Johanna Kim 2 Replies Last reply Reply Quote 3
      • Chip Valecek
        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

        @laurel-aylesworth So far you are on the right track. I would make the girls pants a darker value. RIght now they are blending into the hill she is on. But then again sometimes once color is added it will break it up.


        https://www.instagram.com/chipvalecek/
        https://www.facebook.com/cvalecek
        http://www.cshellmedia.com/

        1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 2
        • LauraA
          LauraA SVS OG last edited by

          I love the composition, the curves of the fish and girl's hair, their gaze, the subsequent appeal to imagination via reading, and it certainly get the idea of big across! I agree with Chip about the pants. And somehow I want the fish to be darker as well. Or maybe I want the girl's shirt and the background to be lighter? I'd just push all the contrasts a little more and use your value range to its fullest. And watch out for the tangent on the left where the edge of the image almost touches the fish's fin and tail.

          Look forward to seeing your progress!

          Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/lauraintorino/
          http://lauraaldersonart.com/

          Laurel Aylesworth 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
          • Laurel Aylesworth
            Laurel Aylesworth @LauraA last edited by

            @lauraa Thank you guys! I was wondering about the fin and if that reads as a tangent. I'll have to figure that one out.

            www.laurelaylesworth.com
            instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
            • Laurel Aylesworth
              Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

              @chip-valecek Thanks Chip! I agree about darkening the pants.

              www.laurelaylesworth.com
              instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

              1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
              • Johanna Kim
                Johanna Kim SVS OG @Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

                @laurel-aylesworth Hi Laurel. I really love your idea and drawing. I hope you don't mind that I did a bit of a draw-over to show my suggestions. It's easier for me to think through my response. When I consider the values for my illos, I find it's helpful to shrink it way down, then adjust values at this scale. I know you didn't ask for additional assistance, but after I adjusted the values, I couldn't help but make some small tweaks here and there. I've noted all the changes I've made, which I think still honors your original idea and drawing, but makes it hopefully easier to read. Let me know what you think:)0_1547657869675_big fish.jpg

                http://www.johannakim.com
                http://instagram.com/johannahkim/

                Laurel Aylesworth 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 4
                • Laurel Aylesworth
                  Laurel Aylesworth @Johanna Kim last edited by

                  @johanna-kim Thanks so much! I hadn't thought of moving the house to the left in the midground. That's an interesting idea I'll play around with. And I like the idea of more breathing room near the fish's side.

                  www.laurelaylesworth.com
                  instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

                  1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                  • W
                    WendyinCA last edited by

                    @laurel-aylesworth I agree that the girl's pants need to be darkened, and I also think lightening the tail fin value would eliminate that as a focal point, so it's not competing with your main focal point.

                    Annemieke 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 3
                    • Annemieke
                      Annemieke SVS OG @WendyinCA last edited by

                      @wendyinca I love the image! I'm not much use in advising on values, as I'm just starting out and struggling with everything myself. I do however feel there's a tangent (if that is the correct word?) where the girl's left foot is aligned with the corner of the fish's mouth. I would either move the foot down a little or the mouth up a little I think. Although I do love the expression on the face of the fish.

                      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                      • Miriam
                        Miriam last edited by

                        I like your idea / composition. I like the feeling of the girl & the fish wondering about one another.

                        I agree with the comments about adding a little space on the left & adjusting the foot / fishes mouth. I like the house and background in the original & agree with other comments that a higher contrast between the fish & the background would be helpful. I really like the girl's pose and the curve of her hair, and how the hair & angles of the girl lead toward the fish's eye. The higher contrast areas of the fish eye, girl's face, & book really draw the focus into that area.

                        1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                        • Laurel Aylesworth
                          Laurel Aylesworth last edited by

                          Hello folks. I'm wrestling with color options. I'm almost tempted to keep it grayscale. I dunno. Or use super muted colors. Any comments/suggestions are welcome. Thanks again!

                          0_1548261075420_fish-color-options.jpg

                          www.laurelaylesworth.com
                          instagram.com/laurelaylesworth

                          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                          • KathrynAdebayo
                            KathrynAdebayo last edited by

                            I'm a fan of number 2 🙂

                            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 2
                            • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                              Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG last edited by

                              Wow! This is really good! I really loke you purple fish. My bet is on 3.

                              Portfolio: nyrrylcadiz.com
                              Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/nyrryl_cadiz/
                              YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCbJCF1Im8ZO7hpGWTKOJMuA

                              1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                              • ArtofAleksey
                                ArtofAleksey last edited by ArtofAleksey

                                I like 4 but i think only because if you made her hair a different color instead of green. Maybe a warmer color so she separates better from the fish. The reason I chose 4 is in all the other ones the color for the hill shes on is the same as her pants.

                                instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                alekseyillustration.com

                                1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                • kaitlinmakes
                                  kaitlinmakes last edited by

                                  I just love 2 - but either way you go these palettes are all so lovely and dreamy - definitely go with color!

                                  https://www.instagram.com/kaitlin.kahn.art
                                  Https://www.kaitlinkahn.com

                                  1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                                  • First post
                                    Last post