"Big" WIP - feedback requested
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@hannahmccaffery Thanks so much for your notes, Hannah! I was planning to dress them all in pajamas, with clues as to what they were doing right before they rushed to Penny's room; hopefully it'll add to the storytelling. And your notes about the cat's positioning is spot on. I've been moving that cat around a lot:) But after a fresh look at my progress, I'm re-thinking the composition. It's not completely resonating with my creative sensor (located in my gut:) but I'll post an update later today.
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Hi All: I returned to my thumbnail/values stage and made an alternative (B), which shows a different perspective. The idea is she's yawning and in doing so, pops the roof off the house. Would appreciate any feedback or preference between (A) and (B).
I'm aware that (B) still needs work to get the perspective correct (been having some trouble in this area) but just want to see if I'm heading in a good direction. Thanks in advance!
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In my opinion B looks amazing.
There are so many added storytelling elements that work so well... the small shoes, the sagging bed...
in case it's helpful, at the moment, it looks to me like the family might be entering the room from outside because of the way the ceiling popped off so cleanly (like it's the edge of the building).
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@johanna-kim I also like B. I would work on her expression. Right now she doesn't come off as yawning. Maybe if you keep one hand over the mouth and then other pushing the ceiling it might show more as yawning.
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Wow I really love option B, wonderful perspective and I absolutely love the family's expressions! I agree about her expression though, at the moment it looks a little like she's roaring and ripping the roof off haha! Maybe adding the hand over the mouth as @Chip-Valecek says, or perhaps you don't need her pushing the roof off? To me it would work just as well if she was yawning but looking quite squished into the top of the room, it would give us even more of an idea of how big she has become!
Can't wait to see this finished
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@johanna-kim Wow! love the idea! I love image B
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@kathrynadebayo Haha! Good point about the family seeming to enter from outside. That thought did cross my mind though I didn't address it. I'm glad you took the time to note it; I'll definitely have to figure out a fix. Thanks for your feedback, Kathryn.
@lenwen Thanks for your preference note. I'm glad because I like that one, too.
@hannahmccaffery @Chip-Valecek Thanks for your suggestions about the yawn. I will definitely take your helpful notes into consideration as I move forward.
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@johanna-kim I love B. I'm so excited to see this one!
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@Johanna-Kim I love seeing your process! Creating out 3 scenes now for a later story is a SUPER cool idea that I may try out in the future. Can't wait to see how this will turn out
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Wow! B is amazing! It really emphasizes the Big-ness of your character!
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I really like "B". I think she does look like she's yawning & I think it'd be just as good either way--with the roof lifting or just reaching up on the ceiling. I think the perspective on B makes it exciting and interesting. I also like the addition of the family members having items showing what they were doing.
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@Johanna-Kim As promised, I'm sharing my process this month. (Note: I'm constantly working to adjust and improve my process. This process is just what I feel most comfortable doing at the moment.) I hope to submit later this evening. As always, notes/feedback are greatly appreciated!
