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    • Chip Valecek
      Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @demotlj last edited by

      @demotlj it might be hard now to change, but that one leaf that is resting on the back of the snail head makes it hard to read the snail shell behind him. It almost breaks him into two pieces.


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      • demotlj
        demotlj SVS OG @Chip Valecek last edited by

        @Chip-Valecek I agree. That’s been bothering me too so I’ll have to see what I can do with it in Procreate.

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        • demotlj
          demotlj SVS OG last edited by

          Real quick fix removing leaf on snail. Is this better?
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            Debra Garcia @demotlj last edited by

            @demotlj much much better

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            • Chip Valecek
              Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @demotlj last edited by

              @demotlj yes, much better. What if you moved his eyes up a little so he is looking toward the spiders or the leaves in front of him. Just a suggestion.


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              • demotlj
                demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                @Chip-Valecek The snail is supposed to be sleeping which is why I dropped his eye stalks over the blob that is supposed to be a rock. The whole thing doesn’t read as well as I hope. A friend if mine also pointed out that a snail shell is smooth and that the striations that I made as indentations are really just color lines so I’ve got to fix that too. Some day I’ll manage to do a watercolor all the way to the end without having to fix it in Procreate but clearly not yet.

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                • demotlj
                  demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                  I started re-doing the snail and now I’m trying to decide how much of the original watercolor to keep and how much to paint over in order to make the style match up better.
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                  • kylebeaudette
                    kylebeaudette last edited by

                    The spider designs jump out at me, otherwise I like the snail and the rest quite a bit!
                    Spiders don't have three segments on their bodies, they have two.spider-thumb.png

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                      demotlj SVS OG @kylebeaudette last edited by demotlj

                      @kylebeaudette You're right. I had started out with only two parts and then was trying to make the spiders look less frightening by enlarging the eyes and inadvertently created a head. I'm embarrassed to have made that mistake. I'll add that to my list of things to fix.

                      This also shows me the importance of continuing to look at my reference throughout the entire process. Both the spiders and the snail shell started out more anatomically correct in my original sketches and then evolved away from that as I did subsequent drawings. My visual memory is terrible 🙂 Thanks for catching it.

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                      • demotlj
                        demotlj SVS OG last edited by demotlj

                        Changed the spiders though now that I look at them again, they look like ticks. I might change the color to make them look more spidery.

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                        • demotlj
                          demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                          Here’s my final painting. Not perfect but ready to move on. Thanks for everyone’s help.
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                          • Jonas Zavacky
                            Jonas Zavacky @demotlj last edited by

                            @demotlj reminds me the good old children books I used to read as a kid ! Really goodjob 🙂

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                            • djly
                              djly last edited by

                              I love the improvements you made from the first to the last post. The snail reads much better and the spiders are also really nicely executed.

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                                demotlj SVS OG @djly last edited by

                                @djly Thanks. This forum is always so helpful in catching those things that aren't working.

                                Laurie DeMott
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