SCBWI prompt and portfolio piece WIP (feedback welcome!)

ArtofAleksey

@NessIllustration OH! nevermind I think rereading what you posted helped me come up with a solution! Thank you!

ArtofAleksey

I’m going to make the dog real and excited to wanna play pretend with the kid. The faces of the stuffed animals are going to be derpy and I’m going to try to make them look fake while the dog more in symmetry with how I’m going to stylize the boy.

I did the doll in the wheel swing in blue just to separate the shapes when I was drawing the thumbnail tiny. But now that I think about it doing a 2 color scheme might be fun to try.

I also want to put a chat bubble of the kid yelling “reach for the clouds, cactus gang!” Or something because when I think stand-off I automatically thought old silly westerns.

NessIllustration

@Aleksey Ouuuhhh I like that!! It's very dynamic and I like the fact that all the bandits are facing us, it really drives home that feeling of being cornered! Great job!

ArtofAleksey

@NessIllustration Thank you for the help it really made a difference.

ArtofAleksey

@NessIllustration Ok this is what I have so far. Would you be willing to share more thoughts?

NessIllustration

@Aleksey Awwww that is so cute! I really like it, the contrast between the seriousness of the character and composition compared to how innoffensive and cute the bandits are makes the image really charming! I think this angle sells your concept really well, and even your values like putting the main character darker, all work towards your story. I also like the perspective on the tire a lot!

braden H

@Aleksey This composition's much stronger, I think

ArtofAleksey

@Braden-Hallett @NessIllustration thanks guys!

I took away the word bubbles because I think it reads well without them. What are your thoohghts?

ArtofAleksey

Ok how does this read?

Nyrryl Cadiz

Hi! I think you have great piece here. Great concept and really fun too. I only have a few issues. Here they are:

The girl’s gun. Instead of making it look she’s pointing it to her toys, it seems like she’s holding it out to the side.
The angle of her face. I think that her face is angled a bit too low and it seems like she’s not quite facing them.
Her dog. You mentioned it a while ago that only her pet dog is the one who seems to be thrilled with all of this. I think you can still push his look such that he really seems that he’s enjoying everything. Make him smile more.

Below is a my quick paint over of your piece. I hope this helps drive my point and help you improve your illustration. So far, it’s already looking great. It just needs a few tweaks.

ArtofAleksey

@nyrrylcadiz yeah these are really good suggestions. I thought about these issues too. Sadly I already submitted the piece but next time I'll pull up these mental notes again. I was really happy with the result to realize i should look over it again and do the fine tuning.