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    • NessIllustration
      NessIllustration Pro last edited by

      I like number 3 the most!

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      • Heather Boyd
        Heather Boyd @Raymond_Kaselau last edited by

        @Raymond_Kaselau I really like #3. It was a pleasant surprise composition. I also like #4 I feel for them both.

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        • Kevin Longueil
          Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Raymond_Kaselau last edited by

          @Raymond_Kaselau I’ll vote for #4 - better moment for me I think , especially if the seated figure is just noticing the paper airplane - maybe a tiny bit more space between the figure and plane? Very nice concept!

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          • Raymond_Kaselau
            Raymond_Kaselau @NessIllustration last edited by

            @NessIllustration thank you kindly!

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            • Raymond_Kaselau
              Raymond_Kaselau @Heather Boyd last edited by

              @Heather-Boyd excellent, thank you!

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                Raymond_Kaselau @Kevin Longueil last edited by

                @Kevin-Longueil thank you Kevin, much appreciated!

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                • Debra Garcia
                  Debra Garcia last edited by

                  I love it. It's like when we throw up defensive walls to protect our hearts from pain, but it's very isolating and lonely. But then that one person comes along, a best friend, a romantic interest, a close family member, finds a way to send us some love over the wall we've built. ❤️ Beautiful

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                  • juliepeelart
                    juliepeelart SVS OG @Raymond_Kaselau last edited by

                    @Raymond_Kaselau I like the strong simple curve of the heart trail on the #3, whichever you pick I would aim for that.

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                    • Debra Garcia
                      Debra Garcia last edited by Debra Garcia

                      One reason that I like 3 is because it seems like the love is coming directly to the figure rather than flying past.

                      But, I also really like the definitive wall and clear separating lines of #1

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                      • theprairiefox
                        theprairiefox last edited by

                        @Raymond_Kaselau I like the figure in #4 better, but I like the line of the plane better in #3. I think I would use the line of the plane in #3 in #4 (but flipped).

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                        • Raymond_Kaselau
                          Raymond_Kaselau @Debra Garcia last edited by

                          @Debra-Garcia thank you, you totally got it 🙂

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                          • Raymond_Kaselau
                            Raymond_Kaselau @Debra Garcia last edited by

                            @Debra-Garcia you're right I like that the airplane is coming directly to the recipient, now I will play with the wall angle. #1 & 4 are more observational, #3 is more of the pov of the character. Since the idea started as the visual metaphor for how love can enter or be void in our lives - now I need to decide what the story / intent is. About the situation or about the character. hmm

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                              Raymond_Kaselau @juliepeelart last edited by

                              @juliepeelart thanks much! Also I just checked your website from your link. Great art, illustrations & comics! Wunderbar!

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                              • Raymond_Kaselau
                                Raymond_Kaselau @theprairiefox last edited by

                                @theprairiefox Thanks much, good direction too - I like where this is heading.

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                                • juliepeelart
                                  juliepeelart SVS OG @Raymond_Kaselau last edited by

                                  @Raymond_Kaselau Thank you! Also I was reading through the comments. I like the strong curve partly because it is coming to the character, that feels hopeful to me. I like @Kevin-Longueils comment too about just noticing the plane. The comments on story telling are fantastic. Do you want it to look like the love is going to make it, or coming straight at the character or passing it by? The curve you choose should back up the story. I can't wait to see where this goes!

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                                  • Laurie
                                    Laurie last edited by

                                    Love this! I'm torn between 3 and 4 because of the flight lines of the plane - in 3, I feel its a look out here i come and you better be ready kind of a plane because of the straight trajectory and in the 4, it feels like more of a meandering flight, more of a chance, more of let's see where this ends up kind of a thing - I like both a lot - I can't wait to see what direction you decide to go!

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                                    • djly
                                      djly @Raymond_Kaselau last edited by

                                      @Raymond_Kaselau I agree with @Ailantan and also love the idea of the heart shape trail. Love where this concept is headed, nice work.

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