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    WIP March book cover composition. Critiques welcome.

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    • J
      JennyJones last edited by

      Big yes to the ripples! I love the current take on the composition.

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      • ArtofAleksey
        ArtofAleksey @djly last edited by

        @djly @JennyJones thanks
        I think I can add a little more components if I push it up a little more.

        instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
        alekseyillustration.com

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        • Sas
          Sas @ArtofAleksey last edited by

          @Aleksey Oh this is nice and so brilliant!!! I loved your foreground though. It gives your piece depth and a 3D lookish effect. The lines in the text is brilliant but makes it a bit difficult to read. Maybe you can make the whole text part of the water? It kind of looks like the text is submerging from underneath the surface. I don't know if that's the effect you were looking for though. I love your reflection of the prince in the water!

          Can't wait to see your progress!

          https://www.instagram.com/sasmakkinje/

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          • CobaB
            CobaB @ArtofAleksey last edited by

            @Aleksey Oh wow! Yes, the first one you've got there with the top down view and the ripples is lovely!!

            ♥ Illustration : https://www.instagram.com/coba_illustration/

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            • ArtofAleksey
              ArtofAleksey @CobaB last edited by

              @CobaB @Sas ok so what I’ve gathered so far is:
              Foreground elements are good but dont overcrowd the piece
              Keep the ripples but make the text clearer.

              I might do a thing where it says “Frog” on the surface of the water, and the O is a lilypad while the word “prince” is being reflected in the water much like the prince himself.

              instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
              alekseyillustration.com

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              • Sas
                Sas @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                @Aleksey Great ideas!!! 😃

                https://www.instagram.com/sasmakkinje/

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                • CobaB
                  CobaB @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                  @Aleksey Yes that sounds brilliant! Yeah it doesn't feel like you are overcrowding it though. So far it looks like you're on the right track and there's enough breathing space. I guess it will come down to how you render and colour it. Very creative with the O, love it!

                  ♥ Illustration : https://www.instagram.com/coba_illustration/

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                  • ArtofAleksey
                    ArtofAleksey @CobaB last edited by

                    @CobaB @Sas thanks. Im so excited to render this because ive been practicing with pen and ink more than brush pens lately. At the very least this will be a good portfolio piece.

                    instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                    alekseyillustration.com

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                    • CobaB
                      CobaB @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                      @Aleksey Cool! Will you also do the colour by hand? I'm not personally that brave! I like to rough out on paper and then colour digital and sometimes I will ink by hand with a brush pen or else those old fashioned dip in ink pens.

                      ♥ Illustration : https://www.instagram.com/coba_illustration/

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                      • ArtofAleksey
                        ArtofAleksey @CobaB last edited by

                        @CobaB no i will color digitally. I will eventually learn how to paint better but because of time I’m only inking traditionally then coloring on my ipad

                        instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                        alekseyillustration.com

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                        • ArtofAleksey
                          ArtofAleksey last edited by ArtofAleksey

                          So the last couple days I’ve been doing some research and asking people I know that understand art and art history better what it is they like about my art. Trying to hone in on when does my art “work” and some of the feedback I’ve been getting on my pieces is that it reminds them of older illustrations done in the 1900s but more cartoony so After doing some research and a few renditions I think I understand it a tiny bit better.
                          So here is my rough sketch, what iz thoughts?
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                          instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                          alekseyillustration.com

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                          • Sas
                            Sas @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                            @Aleksey This looks great! I cant wait to see you work on this further.

                            https://www.instagram.com/sasmakkinje/

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                            • CobaB
                              CobaB @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                              @Aleksey looks good, but I hope the background won't distract from the main detail and title x

                              ♥ Illustration : https://www.instagram.com/coba_illustration/

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                              • ArtofAleksey
                                ArtofAleksey @CobaB last edited by

                                @CobaB if i do this right it should draw your eye to the pond firsr. But even if it doesnt im having lots of fun with this piece

                                instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                alekseyillustration.com

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                                • andersoncarman
                                  andersoncarman @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                  @Aleksey I like this most recent thumbnail except for one thing. The title. I love this as an illustration if you take the title out. but when you add it in, it just becomes too bottom heavy. As an illustration, I like that it has that breathing room on the top third but it is so overcrowded down at the bottom now. I would suggest placing the title up in the top third. not just because that is where title normally goes, but your composition is made for it! you could even make the title out of the rocks and have the water flow around them into the pond! Also, don't forget the author "Brothers Grimm"

                                  Love this! such a clever idea! can't wait to see it complete!

                                  Cheers,
                                  Anderson Carman

                                  https://www.andersoncarman.com/
                                  https://www.instagram.com/andersoncarman/

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                                  • ArtofAleksey
                                    ArtofAleksey @andersoncarman last edited by

                                    @andersoncarman these are some good points. Thanks ill try that out. Leaving the bottom open makes it look a lot better.

                                    instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                    alekseyillustration.com

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                                    • Laurie
                                      Laurie last edited by Laurie

                                      So interested to see how this turns out! Love all the changes you have already made and I really like the reflection concept!

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                                      • ArtofAleksey
                                        ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                        Ok so here is the pre inked rendered pencil version.
                                        Im slowly learning what my preferred drawing process is. It seems that it’s banging my head against something until i figure it out 😛 anyone else share that process?

                                        So what im going for is im trying to surround the scene with lots of details and tones to make the eyes focus on the frog/reflection because the frog is surrounded by less detail and tone.

                                        Is that working? If not, what is working?
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                                        instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                        alekseyillustration.com

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                                        • Heather Bouteneff
                                          Heather Bouteneff @ArtofAleksey last edited by

                                          @Aleksey I love this, especially the clever reflection, the ripples on it like it's representing disturbed life (like interrupted from being a human) and especially that you put the pond up against a natural little waterfall.
                                          My only other comments are so nitpicky and probably just me so honestly you can ignore them- but I wish the ball was bigger, unless this is a person size frog the Princess has lost her golden marble. I am not convinced his expression matches the personality he had in the story either. Here he looks lost and timid and sweet and I love him, but the frog prince was a bit more like a clever bargainer

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                                          • ArtofAleksey
                                            ArtofAleksey @Heather Bouteneff last edited by

                                            @Heather-Bouteneff these ar good point! Yeah he was but there have been several adaptations apparently sometimes the frog doesn’t suck.

                                            instagram and twitter: @artofaleksey
                                            alekseyillustration.com

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