Paddington book cover - thoughts?
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Hey @hannahmccaffery
This is a great start. I like how you spent a little time on a few of the other characters. It's like they each have their own stories they we may not get to read. (Is that a waving dog?
)One thing that bothers me is the perspective. It looks like 3 different horizon lines are being used here. One for everyone at Paddington's eye level and above, one for the suitcase, and one for the passenger below (and possibly for passenger's foot?).
If you were in a room (with lots of stuff in it) and looked straight ahead, your eye line would be the horizon line. It wouldn't just be the horizon line for what you were looking at. It would be the horizon line for everything you see at that moment. So every object would have vanishing points on that single horizon line. Using several horizon lines can work in some situations but I don't think it's working here.
Having said all of that, I really like where this is going.
I did some draw overs to help illustrate my concerns.
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@demetrius thanks so much for taking the time to do those draw overs for me and for your detailed reply
You’re right about the suitcase and guy in the foreground and the horizon line, I didn’t even think about that! I’m not 100% how I can apply that to the people in the background, do you mean that they should look more 3D or that I should angle them more so they’re not all profiles?
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@hannahmccaffery No problem
The woman and daughter, the police officer, and everyone near/on the train all look as if they exist in the same space. For the look I think you're going for, I think they look ok as is. It was just the suitcase and bottom left person that looked out of place.
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@demetrius Ah okay then, i'm in the middle of fixing the suitcase now and i'll work on the man too, thank you
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@hannahmccaffery Really like your cover design. The policeman's sideway glance and the little girl pointing are a nice touch. One note I do have is that I feel like the title is a bit small. Almost insignificant to the cover. I was a commercial artist/Art Director for 20+ years and I'm pretty sure a publisher would want that title bumped up in size a bit. Otherwise, looking forward to the final art.
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It’s looking really good
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@Susy-Barton-Garner I was kind of worried about that too to be honest so I'm glad you've mentioned that it bothers you too, so i'll definitely look at it and make it much bigger
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Hey everyone!
Thanks so much to those who have given me all the brilliant feedback, I've really appreciated it and it helps so much!
Here's a little update on the piece, i've made the title bigger like you suggested @Susy-Barton-Garner and you're right it looks much better, I know it should probably be even bigger but i'm worried about ruining the composition
I think i've managed to adjust the suitcase and foreground @demetrius , i can see where you were coming from now so thank you!
Hopefully his paws don't look like pig hooves now @Dima-Eichhorn ? haha! And I fixed the little girls gaze direction @MichaelaH thank you again I've done some quick colour roughs so I'm just wondering which you all prefer? Or none of them? I'm wondering whether I should drop the whole same colour background idea, however all the people will have more detail on them and be shaded etc.
Also do you think the foreground works with the walking legs and the size of the new title? It overlaps the policeman a bit, so i'm worried that it looks a bit cramped with the bird plonked on the sign too!
Anyways, thanks everyone!
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I think it is ok, that the polie man is behind the sign, because the sign, it comes to me, as it would be the first thing in perspektive. I like all the changes
It looks beautiful.
Color: I don't like any of them. The green and lila not at all and the yellow, I like it, but don't like the green of the sign. What about some light brownrosa to go with the bear as background color or if yellow, than the sign in other color. The bear is to saturated now, I think you will change it later.
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@hannahmccaffery It's better!
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@Dima-Eichhorn Thank you!
@MichaelaH I don't like any of the colours either to be honest, it didn't look the way I was hoping, but maybe the yellow has more potential if i change the colour of the sign like you say, that's a good idea of incorporating some more browns to go with the bear. Thank you for your feedback -
I especially love the yellow one. Paddington just pops out from the background.
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@nyrrylcadiz Thank you
