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    • IgorWoznicki
      IgorWoznicki last edited by

      Whoa, thanks guys! Never expected to get a positive response here 😮
      That's so heartwarming! 😄

      @aprilshin uggh, can't believe I've missed such an obvious tangent!
      Thanks, good eye here! As for the arm's pose, I thought of that at first but it would cover my expression and I want to show some kind of supriese or embarassement on his face. Like he was caught doing something wrong. Thanks for the suggestion though! Those are always welcome 😄

      Spreading art and positive vibes!

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      • Maxi Silva
        Maxi Silva last edited by

        @IgorWoznicki said in Quick feedback on the construction,:

        usually don't struggle with hands that m

        I really love the "line of action" of the drawing. Just a question, is he standing on his tiptoes? or is he floating?

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        • ShannonBiondi
          ShannonBiondi SVS OG last edited by

          I'm only a beginner, but I see so much life in your constructions. The lines are really dynamic and it conveys a lot of movement. Love it!

          @abhainn_fionn

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          • IgorWoznicki
            IgorWoznicki @Maxi Silva last edited by

            Ugh, I really need to leave ya all with more information next time! 😂
            Yes, @Maxi-Silva, the guy is floating 😄
            Gonna indicate that by showing a proper cast shadow underneath his feet.

            Oh, and thanks, @ShannonBiondi! I am really glad someone likes it at this stage 😊

            Spreading art and positive vibes!

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            • animatosoor
              animatosoor @IgorWoznicki last edited by

              @IgorWoznicki I agree with everyone else who's said that your construction looks lively and well-structured. It makes me want to see what it would look like after the details have been added.

              I also like @aprilshin's suggestion for the placement of the hand - I feel like that change would further enhance your pose. 🙂

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              • NelsonYiap
                NelsonYiap last edited by

                This is really solid (no pun intended hehe). Perhaps the only thing I could see is the bended right thigh seems to have the same length as the straight left thigh behind it. It's really not a big deal though. There's plenty of gesture and 3D-ness so I think it's going to look great!

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                • IgorWoznicki
                  IgorWoznicki last edited by IgorWoznicki

                  Again, thank you all so much for positive reactions and some feedback!
                  I pushed the artwork further today and I intent on finishing it tomorrow, thought I will giva ya all on update! 😄

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                  You guys have done enough already but I dare to ask ya' all for some more feedback on this guy ( I quite like him, although I didn't at first! ).
                  As for what I've changed, made some slight adjustments to the leg that appeared too thick and moved his arm a bit closer to the face to further exaggerate the wiping his mouth thing. I still don't want to cover his face and expression, so I don't know If I want to push that even further.

                  I am unsure about the hair I wanna go for. I think I like the flame hair the most but the bald one looks more like nosferatu hence more like a vampire...Ahh, I dunno, you can tell me your favourite!

                  Besides that, I am not sure about the perspective and construction of the bottle. I am also thinking about replacing the hip-flask with a bottle similar to the one he carries on the back. Also, I've lost the dimensionality of his right arm, I believe. 🤔

                  The clothing may change a bit as I go so if ya got some ideas, suggestions or pointers to make in that case, feel free to do so!

                  Spreading art and positive vibes!

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                  • djly
                    djly last edited by

                    I love the character and the pose. The line work is looking really nice as well.

                    I think it was mentioned already, and you mention it in your last post, but I do think having the arm a bit higher would help. It is a bit difficult to read here that he is swiping his mouth. Maybe you could also have a bit of blood dribbling onto his coat?

                    As far as hair, I like the first as I think it helps with balance composition.

                    I hope this helps!

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                      aprilshin @IgorWoznicki last edited by

                      @IgorWoznicki Omg I'm in love with the tattered clothing texture and the huge bottle on his back! For the right arm, I think if you reverse the direction the folds are going and bring his elbow out a little more, it may help bringing it forward.

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                      Honestly I don't even know if that's any better, haha. For the hair, I do like the fire hair, but maybe it could be blowing in the wind like the hair on the left? Basically a combination of the two.

                      I love this character, by the way! And I hope you create a comic/cartoon/anything with him because I'd love to know his story.

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                      • MichaelaH
                        MichaelaH @IgorWoznicki last edited by MichaelaH

                        @IgorWoznicki I would change the belts which holds the bottle, over breast like x would be ok for the bottle now, or if you like to have only belt in waist, ... forget it, I didn‘t see the breast belt...

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                        • IgorWoznicki
                          IgorWoznicki last edited by

                          Final update!
                          Though I will share the final result with ya guys :smiling_face_with_open_mouth_smiling_eyes:
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                          Thanks for all the help ( I didn't change all that much but it's still better than nothing! ) and encouragement! I am not the biggest fan of this one, it's definitely not at the top of my game and I felt like discarding it but all the nice comments made it much easier to push through it. 😄

                          Ultimately, I kinda like the bottle which is funny because this sketch got createad after "I feel like drawing a bottle" thought popped into my head 😂

                          Feel free to leave some extra feedback If you see something worth improving. I'd love to hear some more thoughts!

                          Oh! And @aprilshin, there is no comic/animation coming (unfortunately) but I can give ya my idea for the character! He's basically a vampire who used to be royalty (hence more elegant clothes) but he has escaped his birthplace after he was bit and now he just kinda strolls around the world, carrying a big blood supply in case he runs our of it during his journey. Nothing impressive, really!

                          Spreading art and positive vibes!

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                          • animatosoor
                            animatosoor last edited by

                            This looks really good, @IgorWoznicki! The character himself, the bottle, the rendering, the composition - everything works, in my opinion. Nicely done. 🙂

                            https://www.instagram.com/sooryajart/

                            The Beatles: "Roll up, roll up for the Mystery Tour!"

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                              aprilshin @IgorWoznicki last edited by

                              @IgorWoznicki This is so awesome! Love all the details and I especially love the character's backstory! Thanks so much for sharing this with us! 😃

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