First Attempt at Creating a Scene - Feedback Welcome!
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@animatosoor Thank you so much for your feedback! I never thought about how distracting the plant could be smack dab in the middle, lol. I also agree that the silhouette of the lady is unclear and that the gentleman's expression is vague. Thank you for the tips, and I'll work on how to improve on these things.
Also, I just went through your Finishing Drills thread and it's so awesome!!! I love the energy and personality in your pieces. SO GOOD. Thank you for taking your time to offer your advice. I really appreciate it!
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@Alicja-W Hi Alicja! Thank you for taking the time to offer your feedback! Yes, I'm now realizing that I didn't take enough time to explore his expression and posture to nail it down. I've also thumbnailed them being in the same room, but I didn't like it as much. I'm thinking I need to go back to exploring that option more, though. Thank you again for your help! It's very helpful!
Also, I was browsing through your IG and your introduction thread and you are so dang good! One of my favorites is the one with the leaning trees with the girl and the flying birds. I can totally see that in a children's book! I also love your Bristle & Nettles painting. So dang cute. Love your work!
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@theprairiefox Thank you for the feedback! I definitely need to figure out how to make that more clear. I appreciate you taking time out of your day to help me out!
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@TessaW Hello Tessa! Wow, what a difference that makes! Thank you so much for taking the time to do this, and thank you for your kind words! I took a gander at your IG and the compositions you made for Inktober are stunning! So much movement and emotion. I have so much to learn~
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@NelsonYiap Hi Nelson! Ooo I never thought about switching the colors. That's an interesting idea! I will definitely need to work on the pose and expression of the gentleman. Thanks for taking the time to offer your feedback! It's very much appreciated!
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@aprilshin i love the story behind this. How about making the man look more excited maybe straightening his tie on the doorstep and you could do a ghostly apparition of his (recently departed) wife peering out the window. Like an excited school girl before her first date
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@aprilshin
Not a problem! Maybe you don't even have to implement what I suggested, and just focus your time on the characters and how their personalities and actions come across to the viewer? A suggestion is cropping the scene so that image gives the viewer a clear shot on the characters (I also definitely agree to move the plant!)
Obviously this would change the whole composition, but I think it would give a clearer view of the scene that's taking place inside the room and allow you to add some more detail where things read unclearly.And thank you for the kind words!
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@sarahlawrence Ah, yes. So many options I haven't explored! Thank you for the great idea!
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@Alicja-W Hmm I think you have a really good point there. I've always been so scared of creating backgrounds/complete scenes that that's what I focused on in this piece not realizing that the focus still needs to be on the characters and the story. Thanks for that insight! I'm going to hold onto that one for future pieces!
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@aprilshin You're welcome! Please do post updates; the folks here - including myself - would be more than happy to help you along, hehe.
Thank you, also, for the compliments!
