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    • Dulcie
      Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

      This is a lovely concept @Leontine, and so beautifully painted too. It's going to be a good critique session tonight!

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      • Leontine
        Leontine @Dulcie last edited by

        @Dulcie Thank You! It was FUN and there's so much to learn from these wonderful people-teachers @Will-Terry and @Lee-White! You guys rock! Ill take it to the next level and try to join in next session.

        Leontine
        "A picture is worth a thousand words."

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        • Jonathon B
          Jonathon B last edited by

          Nice work and seeing this piece critiqued last night was a great.

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          • Leontine
            Leontine @Jonathon B last edited by

            @Jonathon-B Yes it was you...Your illustration is really cool as wel! hopefully it helps you to enhance it!

            Leontine
            "A picture is worth a thousand words."

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            • Camila Picheco
              Camila Picheco last edited by

              I loved this so much, its adorable. You nailed the hedgehog expression... you can feel his sadness, and you feel the warm inside to see that the friends are going to do him a surprise visit.

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              • Leontine
                Leontine @Camila Picheco last edited by

                @Camila-Picheco Thank you Camila!

                Leontine
                "A picture is worth a thousand words."

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                • Lee White
                  Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                  Great work Leontine! Here's the image from the crit last night if you want to see it...Leontine Gaasenbeek Hedgehog.jpg

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                  • Dulcie
                    Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

                    Looks amazing... Would be lovely to do a follow-up piece with hedgehog all happy at his party 🙂

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                    • Leontine
                      Leontine @Lee White last edited by

                      @Lee-White Thanks Lee!

                      Leontine
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                      • Rich Green
                        Rich Green SVS OG last edited by Rich Green

                        I was looking at the paint over that Lee did and I think it loses some of the emotion. In your original placement of the little hedgehog he is sitting in a corner looking at the tree all alone. It is sad and you can feel his loneliness on Christmas.

                        With Lee moving the hedge hog across the room, he may still appear sad but it no longer has that more specific feeling of being alone on Christmas as the cause of his sadness. I really miss that connection in the paint over.

                        If part of the reason for flipping the hedge hog to the other side of the room was to make him face inwards and draw the viewers eye into the rest of the scene, I think that is fine. But I would then consider rearranging the room a bit to put the tree near him again so we can feel that connection more.

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                        • joanie stone
                          joanie stone last edited by

                          I really like this piece and I think your character design is fantastic.

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                          • Dulcie
                            Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

                            Ooh interesting points @Rich-Green, yes I see what you mean. In the first one hedgehog looks like he's staring forlornly at his only present...that connection gave you a clue about his thoughts. I agree maybe rearranging the furniture, eg swapping the bed with the tree/present, might help.

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                            • Leontine
                              Leontine @Rich Green last edited by

                              @Rich-Green I agree with you and try and place the tree on the other side. maybe place the bed somewhere else as well. During the weekend, Ill work on it!

                              Leontine
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                              • Leontine
                                Leontine @Dulcie last edited by

                                @Dulcie Thank you, I agree and play around with it.

                                Leontine
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                                • Lee White
                                  Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                  I agree with Rich about moving some of the elements around. Moving the hedgehog over there was a composition fix. When you move a main character other things will definitely need to be adjusted around them.

                                  Really cool piece. Can't wait to see where you go with it! : )

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                                  • Leontine
                                    Leontine @Lee White last edited by

                                    @Lee-White @Rich-Green Thank you again for your help. Now with all nice comments I can take it further!

                                    Leontine
                                    "A picture is worth a thousand words."

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                                    • smoke
                                      smoke last edited by

                                      Naamloos-1.jpg
                                      sorry for my crappy sketch but it should make my point clear !this is what i see, because the cap is over the lightbal, its sort of blocking the light so the cap and the ceiling on top of the lamp should be darker, i know you have bouncing light , but thats less stronger, and you should change the moon or redo it because that looks to digital and not rendered enough!
                                      overall, i realy like your piece,love the details composition, the carcters looking adorable , your a great artist! but understanding light is hard, i also struggle with it, but where learning everyday!! 😉

                                      smoke

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                                      • Leontine
                                        Leontine @Nancy Gormezano last edited by

                                        @Nancy-Gormezano thank youuuu!

                                        Leontine
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                                        • Leontine
                                          Leontine @johntatulliart last edited by

                                          @johntatulliart Thank you John!

                                          Leontine
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                                          • Leontine
                                            Leontine @smoke last edited by

                                            @smoke Thank you! Yes, there's still a lot of work on this one!

                                            Leontine
                                            "A picture is worth a thousand words."

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