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    • Rich Green
      Rich Green SVS OG last edited by Rich Green

      I was looking at the paint over that Lee did and I think it loses some of the emotion. In your original placement of the little hedgehog he is sitting in a corner looking at the tree all alone. It is sad and you can feel his loneliness on Christmas.

      With Lee moving the hedge hog across the room, he may still appear sad but it no longer has that more specific feeling of being alone on Christmas as the cause of his sadness. I really miss that connection in the paint over.

      If part of the reason for flipping the hedge hog to the other side of the room was to make him face inwards and draw the viewers eye into the rest of the scene, I think that is fine. But I would then consider rearranging the room a bit to put the tree near him again so we can feel that connection more.

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      • joanie stone
        joanie stone last edited by

        I really like this piece and I think your character design is fantastic.

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        • Dulcie
          Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

          Ooh interesting points @Rich-Green, yes I see what you mean. In the first one hedgehog looks like he's staring forlornly at his only present...that connection gave you a clue about his thoughts. I agree maybe rearranging the furniture, eg swapping the bed with the tree/present, might help.

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          • Leontine
            Leontine @Rich Green last edited by

            @Rich-Green I agree with you and try and place the tree on the other side. maybe place the bed somewhere else as well. During the weekend, Ill work on it!

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            • Leontine
              Leontine @Dulcie last edited by

              @Dulcie Thank you, I agree and play around with it.

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              • Lee White
                Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by

                I agree with Rich about moving some of the elements around. Moving the hedgehog over there was a composition fix. When you move a main character other things will definitely need to be adjusted around them.

                Really cool piece. Can't wait to see where you go with it! : )

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                • Leontine
                  Leontine @Lee White last edited by

                  @Lee-White @Rich-Green Thank you again for your help. Now with all nice comments I can take it further!

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                  • smoke
                    smoke last edited by

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                    sorry for my crappy sketch but it should make my point clear !this is what i see, because the cap is over the lightbal, its sort of blocking the light so the cap and the ceiling on top of the lamp should be darker, i know you have bouncing light , but thats less stronger, and you should change the moon or redo it because that looks to digital and not rendered enough!
                    overall, i realy like your piece,love the details composition, the carcters looking adorable , your a great artist! but understanding light is hard, i also struggle with it, but where learning everyday!! 😉

                    smoke

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                      Leontine @Nancy Gormezano last edited by

                      @Nancy-Gormezano thank youuuu!

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                      • Leontine
                        Leontine @johntatulliart last edited by

                        @johntatulliart Thank you John!

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                        • Leontine
                          Leontine @smoke last edited by

                          @smoke Thank you! Yes, there's still a lot of work on this one!

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