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    Accountability help and serious critique requested--which color?

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    • LauraA
      LauraA SVS OG last edited by

      @theprairiefox @TessaW @JennyJones Thank you so much for the input! I was falling in love with that S curve in the blanket, but you're right, I should experiment more with the trailing "hair" shape and elongate it. Good to know that the tendency is to the second color scheme, which I can still experiment with. I already had two or three variations of blue in my trials but was getting overwhelmed. I like the yellow scheme too because it evokes the interior of the apartment.

      Oh, and the first bit of "hair" is a pair of tights! 😂 I love kids' imagination and enthusiasm--it keeps me drawing.

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      • xin li
        xin li last edited by

        @LauraA The illustration is very tender and soft. You have captured something very beautiful here.
        What I find it hard to give input is that I do not know what the illustration is for, and how it will be used. For example, if the illustration is meant as a gift for the little boy portrayed, I would think of his favorite color, and try to incorprate that into the painting.

        Personally I lean a bit more toward color option #2 as well, mainly because of the treatment of the background. But right now the red blanket, and the blue dress compete with each other, beacuse both color are very saturated. I would choose one thing to focus on.

        Hope this make sense 🙂

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        • LauraA
          LauraA SVS OG last edited by

          Hi guys! Just thought I'd post this redraw with a longer blanket and some of the details worked out. Just realized I need to fill out the blanket hand, maybe bring it closer to the body, and I may angle that side of the blanket out a bit more. Anyway, without making it a fantasy piece, I did elongate the blanket. No pattern yet, because if I do that, I think I'll do it with scanned textures once I get into the color and shading. Right now he looks as if he has a case of the just-woke-up stares. Suggestions welcome!

          Francesco as Rapunzel 3 smaller.jpg

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          • LauraA
            LauraA SVS OG last edited by LauraA

            Here is the more or less finished version, because I want to start knocking out some pieces more quickly. I did take down the blue a bit, add some pattern, and exaggerate the length a bit more. I'm still open to suggestions, though!

            P.S. The decision not to wrap the pattern was purposeful. I'm playing with the balance between flat design (composition, color and pattern) and volume (shading, perspective, rounded forms). I'm open to critiques about how well it works, though.

            Francesco as Rapunzel version 2 color 3.jpg

            Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/lauraintorino/
            http://lauraaldersonart.com/

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            • BichonBistro
              BichonBistro @LauraA last edited by

              @LauraA I love how you elongated the blanket

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              • demotlj
                demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                This is beautiful. The child's face and stance are so endearing and the blanket is lovely.

                Laurie DeMott
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                • LauraA
                  LauraA SVS OG last edited by LauraA

                  So I sent the drawing above to my friend. She loved it! And she wanted it signed. But apparently little Francesco's reaction was that he wanted his hair yellow, like his sister's tights. So here we go--a yellow version!

                  I had to make some parts darker to balance the lighter yellow. Still have to figure that part out.

                  Francesco as Rapunzel smaller 5 (yellow).jpg

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                  • LauraA
                    LauraA SVS OG last edited by

                    @BichonBistro @demotlj Thank you! I thought the face looked a little too tired in the color version so I made some slight changes that you can see in the yellow version.

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                    • demotlj
                      demotlj SVS OG @LauraA last edited by

                      @LauraA I can see the difference but can't figure out what you did to the face to bring out that subtly. How did you get the expression to look less tired?

                      Laurie DeMott
                      instagram.com/demotlj

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                      • LauraA
                        LauraA SVS OG @demotlj last edited by

                        @demotlj There were some slight changes around the eyes, for example in the red version I had made the upper eyelid fold pinker and put a pink line under each eye. As you know, with an illustrated face sometimes a couple of lines can make a big difference!

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                        • xin li
                          xin li last edited by

                          @LauraA The pattern is lovely. It would be fun to see a texture overlay on top of the pattern, so it intergrates to the rest of the image even more.

                          Web: www.lixin.no
                          IG: www.instagram.com/lixin.illustration/

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