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    • Lydia M
      Lydia M last edited by

      You'd have to re-do it so his head is facing the cake. He could still have the same expression and you'd see what he's so excited about when you open the card.

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      • audrey dowling
        audrey dowling last edited by

        yep that's a good idea. thanks @gimmehummus

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        • audrey dowling
          audrey dowling last edited by

          better isn't it?

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          • bharris
            bharris last edited by

            I like the adjustments you've made! Really cute idea!

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            • audrey dowling
              audrey dowling @bharris last edited by

              thank you @bharris 🙂

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              • Kevin Longueil
                Kevin Longueil SVS OG last edited by

                That top edge looks better for sure - it is neat how in the first one you see the face and the cake right away and then open it up for the text..... i am just thinking out loud here - i like what you have done and think it looks great - but would it be possible to have an unequally folded card where the tail section of the trifold idea is longer than the other two sections? so that you see the cake and the head right away and then open it... it really is good the way you have it - just thought i would share that idea 🙂

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                • audrey dowling
                  audrey dowling last edited by

                  I thought about it Kevin, and finally I went with this idea, as I won't really have this card printed anyway. it was more about practice. So I just kept it standard. But if it eventually gets printed, I will definitely suggest the idea to the client
                  thanks for sharing your thoughts 🙂

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                  • Dulcie
                    Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

                    It's a great idea, he/she is a lot of fun and beautifully painted!

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                    • Joy Heyer
                      Joy Heyer last edited by

                      This is a very cute card! Quick thought...you could keep the original fold with the snake looking at the cake and then paint the snake's head and tail on the inside of the flaps with the eyes looking the other way. Not sure that made sense... Basically you would draw two heads and two tails. One on the outside and one on the inside. Anyway, just a thought.

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                      • Chip Valecek
                        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Joy Heyer last edited by

                        @Joy-Heyer made a good point. I like that idea.


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                        • MOO
                          MOO SVS OG last edited by

                          Very cute and creative idea 🙂 I like it. I also liked hearing the others feedback. I think there are some who are better at seeing the little things that can enhance the work.

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                          • Lydia M
                            Lydia M last edited by

                            Looks great! There's a payoff (invitation to go eat cake) when they open it.

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                            • Leontine
                              Leontine last edited by

                              Love it! There's the first card for your collection! Chapeau!

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                              • Lee Holland
                                Lee Holland last edited by

                                Really nice audrey well done. you painted it really well.

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