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    • kai satoshi
      kai satoshi @Nancy Gormezano last edited by

      @Nancy-Gormezano Thanks Nancy... Yeah, I may have went a bit too heavy on the rim lighting... It was tricky trying to get the contrast with the cow.... But I'm going to play around with toning it down a bit. Thanks for the critique 🙂

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      • kai satoshi
        kai satoshi @Naroth Kean last edited by

        @Naroth-Kean Thanks 🙂

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        • kai satoshi
          kai satoshi @Guest last edited by

          @Damien-Rambacher Thanks! Yes, I darkened it a bit to try to bring more contrast but I think you are right, it looked a bit better with the lighter background. I will work on that. Thanks for the critique. 🙂

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          • kai satoshi
            kai satoshi @Dulcie last edited by

            @Dulcie
            I appreciate the compliment. Thank you! 🙂

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              Art Monkey last edited by

              Looks pretty crazy man. I like your expressions on the animals.

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              • kai satoshi
                kai satoshi @Art Monkey last edited by

                @Art-Monkey Thanks! Glad you like it. 🙂

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                • kai satoshi
                  kai satoshi last edited by

                  So here is another. The changes I made were to lower the brightness of some of the rim lighting on the cow, pig and gerbil. Lightened the background a bit then brightened the overall painting slightly as well as a slight bit more contrast. I'd love to hear anymore thoughts you guys might have for this image. Thanks a bunch 🙂
                  Final 1.jpg

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                  • Nancy Gormezano
                    Nancy Gormezano last edited by Nancy Gormezano

                    Yes! I like! (the changes are wonderful)

                    And now we will hear from the Text/Font/Grammar/All animals matter Nazi:

                    I love your rhyme - but I question capitalizing Reindeer, Gerbil and Chicken (but not pig, cow). Actually none of them should be capitalized unless you are doing a design (or those are their formal names). Then capitalize them all!

                    I would prefer a handwritten look to the text. But if you use a standard font, perhaps a more flowy, irregular placement, of the words, rather than straight blocky?

                    Text/fonts are my nemesis. I have a horrible time getting it right in my own stuff, and rarely succeed. So take my critique with a grain of snowflake salt (except for the capitalizing part).

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                    • kai satoshi
                      kai satoshi @Nancy Gormezano last edited by

                      @Nancy-Gormezano

                      ABSOLUTELY!!!! Yes, the text was the last thing I was going to deal with. I mostly threw it in there so I could get a feel for spacing and size but yes you are absolutely right about my capitalization issues :). I will definitely deal with those before turning it in.

                      If you have any ideas for some good fonts I would love to look for them online. I know it is a battle between making it very easily readable and at the same time being something that is visually nice to look at. My typography knowledge is... well, there is none. HAHA. But yes, if you or anyone else have any good thoughts about some quality fonts I could get that would be great! Thank you for the critique!

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                        seanwelty @kai satoshi last edited by

                        @Kris-Knight This has gotten better with each iteration. I really like the colors and value structure. A couple things you can look at that bother me about the image:

                        1. Santa's eyes creep me out a bit. They seem to be completely popped out of the head.
                        2. The eggs under the chicken do not add value for me. They are more distracting.
                        3. Some of the reins look pasted on like around the cows muzzle, around the chicken's waist, and around the pig.
                        4. I also am not sure the large moon is adding anything to your image.

                        By the way I really like the smiley face inside the ball. Nice detail.

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                        • Jana
                          Jana last edited by

                          Hi Kris!
                          I like this piece so much. 🙂
                          I wanted to say two things, which are more or less said by sean (@seanwelty) already.
                          I think that the moon is a bit distracting. I would make it smaller or would not show it at all, even if it is the light source.
                          The animals look a bit like cut and pasted. I guess this can be repaired by giving their edges a bit more blue light, so that they blend more into their environment.
                          The panic cow is my favorite! 🙂 This whole piece will turn out great. 🙂

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                          • Rich Green
                            Rich Green SVS OG last edited by

                            Really like your painting and the way you have handled the lights on the ball and the reflection of them.

                            The one place I think is not working is the really large moon. It seems way out of proportion given that Santa and the crew are not really that high up in the sky. Also the value on the moon is less than the highlights you created for the the sack of toys Santa is delivering. I don't think they would be brighter than the light source itself (the moon) so I find that a bit distracting. I would either make the moon smaller and a bit brighter or remove it completely from the scene as you really do no need in in there.

                            But all of that said the expressions on the animals are all perfectly done. Really enjoy this image alot!

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                            • kai satoshi
                              kai satoshi @seanwelty last edited by kai satoshi

                              @seanwelty Thanks Sean. Santa's face has been a bit of an issue for me because of how small he is. I've actually painted his face/eyes a few different times. Up close it isn't bad but as you get further away his eyes don't read right. I'm attaching a pic of what he looks like up close. As you can see, he has a pair of glasses on. I may end up having to give him just black dot eyes or something. I'm not sure to be honest. I'll attempt to work on the reins as well. I actually like my moon lol. but I see there are a few people here that think it may need changing so I will paint over it and see what I come up with. Thanks for the critiques! 🙂 Always appreciatedScreen Shot 2015-11-24 at 5.19.36 PM.png

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                              • kai satoshi
                                kai satoshi @Rich Green last edited by

                                @Rich-Green
                                Thanks Rich... Yeah it seems there are a few people that feel the moon needs a change. I will mess around with that. Thank you 🙂

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                                • bharris
                                  bharris last edited by

                                  LOVE IT!

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                                  • kai satoshi
                                    kai satoshi @bharris last edited by

                                    @bharris Thank you! 🙂

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                                    • Rob Smith
                                      Rob Smith last edited by

                                      @Kris-Knight Your rendering skills are very good. Love the image! The only comment I have is what if you de-saturated the background a little to allow your characters to pop. In specific the turquois lighting. My eye keeps going there. Just a thought....great job!

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                                      • kai satoshi
                                        kai satoshi @Rob Smith last edited by

                                        @Rob-Smith Hey Rob. Thanks for the critique, I'll definitely mess around with the saturation to see what it looks like. Thanks 🙂

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                                        • kai satoshi
                                          kai satoshi last edited by

                                          NEW WIP
                                          So here is another version of my 3rd Thursday. Based on critiques as well as painting in a different style.

                                          Screen Shot 2015-12-01 at 12.22.59 PM.png

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                                          • Lydia M
                                            Lydia M last edited by

                                            Hi Kris. I don't think their speed is coming through because there isn't a continuous line in the reins. The angles are all broken up. I liked their expressions in the original. The cow looks like he's going "meh" in this one. You know when someone takes off in a fast car and they get pushed back and look like they're straining against it? That would show how excited and surprisingly speedy that hamster is.

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