WIP Please critic!

phoenix yip

Any thoughts on this?

@phoenix-yip I think it's a really well done image, I love the colors you used and the way you composed and rendered it, but can you tell me more about the flying vehicle? is the person following the tracks? Closer to the viewer, the tracks make it look like the person was hopping. Farther away, it looks like the person started running.

I noticed your other post but got caught up in trying to figure out what was happening and was distracted from telling you.

Kevin Longueil

@phoenix-yip This is a really nice drawing! I love the perspective! What pops into my head for critique is that maybe the tracks could be in less of a straight line...just a bit of a curve maybe? The other thing would be to make the locomotion of the tracks consistent ...but that could be part of what is making them different? Right now the tracks start as being parallel sets and transition into a stepping or walking pattern. That’s all I’ve got I really like your “trees”!!

APHOTICMOTH

I didn't see the flying vehicle until the 3rd time I looked at it. Perhaps a brighter red power stream, and some harder lighting on it? Is the vehicle metallic or dull?

Great scene though.

APHOTICMOTH

There is also an tangent where the nose meets the tree. Overlap it a bit maybe.

phoenix yip

@carolinedrawing I see, thank you!

phoenix yip

@CLCanadyArts Thank you, that very helpful!

theprairiefox

@phoenix-yip I agree about not seeing the vehicle... I didn't see it until I read the comment about it.

I had one other thought. The trees seemed a little off to me and I think it is because there are no larger trees up higher. It almost looks like you are outside the grove from looking at the tops of the trees, but then looking at the trunks it looks like they woods continue on forever. Not sure which you are going for?

phoenix yip

@Kevin-Longueil I agree, thanks a lot!

Jenna Jenks

@phoenix-yip it's a really dynamic perspective ️ You are given a distinct feeling of a ominous danger! Looks fantastic