Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?
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I just love this! The only thing that bothers me a little bit is the perspective of the top cupboards. I feel kind of like they're falling forward. Otherwise, the style and color are really nice!
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@Braden-Hallett I agree with @demotlj and share @Jeremy-Ross 's sentiment
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@Braden-Hallett i love it! For me it works perfectly.
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@Braden-Hallett I love how you treat the background and foreground. I think Miyazaki's movies have a similar approach: more painterly environment and background, only use linework for emphasis - mostly just in the characters.
I think your texture is working pretty well. It does not look super digital at all. You can always experiment more on this, based on the story you are creating, for example giving the dog fury texture.
It is a super cool style for children's books.
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I don't think it looks too sketchy at all! In fact, I like it even better than your usual work--but that's just a matter of my taste, not your ability. It looks to me like it could either be digital or a controlled kind of watercolor and pencil. I might define (only) the scissors a tiny bit more as they are in the foreground--maybe just an occlusion shadow and a minimum of dimension to the blades.
You didn't ask this, but the question came to mind: My favorite thing about this piece is the dog (the dragon is a close second but it's made secondary by the high-key value). I love how flat he is against the ground, how totally old, zonked out and indifferent he looks (like he's seen this game a million times), and my eye goes right to him because of his size and value. But the rest of the story seems to be about a child who is building a knight-fighting-dragon scenario out of cardboard boxes. Does the dog play an integral part in this part of the story? If not, as much as I love him, he may be a distraction. And what is the child doing with that cushion? Probably the rest of the story explains it all, but this is just what comes to mind looking at this one image.
But as for the sketchiness, go for it! It's great!
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Thanks everyone for weighing in! This is definitely something I'll play with from here on out
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@peteolczyk said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
I didn’t Actually know you were using a sketchy overlay
It's more the actual paper grain on the overlay than anything else
@NessIllustration said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
still looks pretty clean, by most people's sketch standards haha!
Must... be... Sketchier! lol. Thank you
@TessaW said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
I think that overall your texture is working really well, but for my taste the foreground elements are a step away from being a little blurry- so I'd just watch out for that.
Interesting! I'll keep an eye on that
@LauraA said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
My favorite thing about this piece is the dog
Drawing Fat old hounds is the reason for art to exist.
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@Braden-Hallett I like the idea of having the linework soften in the background. It really brings out the focal point of the piece.
I really "see" the hound because of the solid linework on him. I am wondering about the kid though. The lines are not as strong on him/her and I wonder if that is pushing them back? It almost feels like the dog is closer to the viewer.
You might want to think about your "rules" for line work to emphasize focal points and portray depth.
I do love where you are going with this style.
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@Braden-Hallett I think it is a lovely sharp style. Don't change a thing!
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@Braden-Hallett said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
-Does the lineart and loose colour in the environment/background work?
This work is still very much you. If you wanted to be looser I'd like to see you push that more to experiment and if you go to far you use some restrain and find what works for you. I don't understand loose colour (I'd need examples). Like watercolour bleeds and wet on wet is what strikes to mind when you say loose colour. I do like that the background has been lightened (but that's a value thing).-Does the texture/ brushwork look super digital? As in 'hey that just looks like a texture overlay you lazy person'.
First off lazy... you are not, let's make that CLEAR! lols. In my opinion its doesn't look super digital but I do recognise it as a digital piece (take what you will from that). Perhaps if you did / or showed a traditional made version I could better compare, because I recon I have only seen your digital. I know you don't "overlay (you lazy person)" however I do find your textures uniformed sometimes (repeated) (I can see how some would say uptight/ was that the word...).Your content is certainly playful!
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@Braden-Hallett I think it REALLY looks great and creates a huge idea of space and the characters in their setting.
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@Braden-Hallett I am just dittoing everything everyone else says- but had to pipe in because- this is amazing. I love that you aren't resting on one thing and keep pushing forward. I would 100% pick up a book with this art from the library for my kids. I don't think it looks too digital at all. I can't wait to see what else you do.
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@Annaaronson said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
I love that you aren't resting on one thing and keep pushing forward
well when that 'one thing' doesn't get you much work, needs as must, lol. But thank you
@theprairiefox said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
You might want to think about your "rules" for line work to emphasize focal points and portray depth
Don't worry. This was a sketchy sketch only
@Heather-Boyd said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
I hope something of that was helpful,
Absolutely! Thank you!
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I love what you've done here. I would choose this book to read to my kids, very kid friendly. Curious have you illustrated children's books for publishers before? If not, I say the time is now! If so, tell me what book/s so I can buy it/them!
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@KaraDaniel that's good to hear! Thank you
I have not illustrated anything yet, no. -
-I think the line art is great, didn’t stand out to me in a bad way at all. I think maybe some colors could be added in the background to tie in the foreground and the background even though they are supposed to be separate I think it looks a bit too flat right. Not a huge issue but that would be the first thing I would focus on
-textures look great, not super obviously digitalAltogether a nice piece
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I like the changes you made to this on your website!
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@Griff Thanks for the feedback
@LauraA said in Critique/suggestions: too loose? Not loose enough? Just right?:
I like the changes you made to this on your website!
Thanks! I think it turned out pretty well.
