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    • LauraA
      LauraA SVS OG last edited by

      I just wanted to say that I love the colors in all of them!!

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        Juli last edited by

        @LauraA thank you 😊

        https://www.instagram.com/juliana.kralik/?hl=de

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        • Melanie Ortins
          Melanie Ortins @Juli last edited by

          @Juli I like the colours! But I think it's overall a bit too dark now. If you're using Photoshop, I would try doing a quick levels adjustment while you have the black and white filter one just to try and get a little more light in key areas.

          Looking forward to seeing how this turns out!

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          • jenithornhill
            jenithornhill last edited by

            The trees on the sides really frame the characters now. I think this is a much better composition.

            Jennifer Thornhill
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            • chrisaakins
              chrisaakins last edited by

              @Juli are the ghosts in the background important? Because if they are they are getting lost in the darkness. I really like warm palette you chose. It is a good composition.

              Chris Akins
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                Juli last edited by

                @Melanie-Ortins yeah, you might be right : D I will try some color corrections as soon as I think I'm finished 😊
                @chrisaakins I think I might try to make their eyes a little brighter as they are now. But my idea was to make them the second read : D I'm really not experienced in composition though.

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                So this is how it looks now. Oh guys I struggled so much but also learned so much painting it : D It is not quite finished yet but I am at a point where I can see the end. Any feedback? Suggestions? Critiques? 🙂

                https://www.instagram.com/juliana.kralik/?hl=de

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                • KaraDaniel
                  KaraDaniel last edited by

                  Looking good. It's a bit dark all over. Where they are close to the fire could be lightened up. The only other thing that stands out to me is the girls left arm that's on the knee. I like her pose but the arm is very long. Nice color palette!

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                  • Braxton
                    Braxton last edited by Braxton

                    This is a really nice picture! One small thing: for me, having the fire in the dead center throws me off a bit...you might experiment with different crops and see if something feels right. For example, this is what it looks like if you crop a bit off the right
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                    At least to me this makes the composition feel slightly less static? It's probably a matter of taste though...

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                    • T
                      TD Sketches last edited by TD Sketches

                      It looks good so far. I agree with cropping it, so the focal point isn't center. Also might make it pop more with increased contrast. Something like this but done better, I think Will Terry has made similar adjustments to illustrations in the past. Just an idea, you might like it better the way you have it.
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                      • J
                        Juli last edited by

                        thank you all so much for your feedback 🙂 I think it improved the image a lot!

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                        So I think I'm finished now. Maybe I will take a look at it later and change some tiny things but not much 👀
                        except someone has something that definitely should be changed! : D so thanks again you all 😊

                        https://www.instagram.com/juliana.kralik/?hl=de

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                        • Jon Anderson
                          Jon Anderson SVS OG @Juli last edited by

                          @Juli Hi! I think you made the suggested changes quite nicely and it definitely helped the piece come along. The only thing I would suggest at this point is to spend a little more time on the finishing touches of highlights on everything around the fire. Obviously you don't want to go overboard but a campfire in the dark can still light up things as close as the characters and the stakes are a little more than you have them. That might add a little more value diversity, too.

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