Nightfall WIP Feedback Request
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I reworked the ladder a bit and adjusted some of the fence to hopefully match perspective a bit better. Does this one look better than the first one? I really want to try and get the perspective right before I move on and make the larger version or I feel like it'll be REALLY hard to fix
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@jdubz Oh and I also swapped the sunset/moon positions because I felt like maybe it was getting too busy on the right side. I'll probably crop the left side significantly but I was hoping the moon would draw the eye back into the picture.
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@jdubz Love the new placement of the moon! That really balanced out the composition. Great work!!!!!
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@Kaela-McCoy Thanks for the feedback! How does the ladder look to you? Does it look natural or weird?
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I love this perspective and the reflection of color from the water on the diver's face. Very nice!
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@jdubz It definitely looks in perspective to me! Nothing about it really stood out to me as being off. But I suppose, realistically, it would have some handrails and a sturdy platform like the picture here! But I wouldn't want the ladder to take away from everything else in your drawing, though. Personally, I like it as-is.
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Awesome thanks I appreciate it!
@Kaela-McCoy what's so funny is thinking back to when I was a kid how much less safe everything was back in the 80s even (at least where we lived lol). I remember the "high dive" which was probably really only maybe 12 feet but it felt so high up to us. It had no railings, just steps to the top board and there were these side-grip-like things just to hold on to before you jumped.
I'm going to try and carve some time out today to start blocking this in on the final size.
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This is so fun! Brings back childhood memories of renting out the local pool for parties at night. I was a kid in the 80s/90s and I remember the design of your current diving board.
I'm wondering what a little bit of a directional splash would look like coming from either side, close to the corners? Just a little one, similar to what you have going on under the left hand.Great job!
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@TessaW That's a good suggestion, I'll work on trying to incorporate that in the larger version.
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@jdubz this is looking great. Her face is gonna hurt in a few minutes.
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@chrisaakins said in Nightfall WIP Feedback Request:
Her face is gonna hurt in a few minutes.
This is true
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Put together the final size and I'm almost there. Blocked in the colors yesterday and then worked on the lighting this morning.
I've got some clean up to do and a few more details. And then I'll try and mess with contrast and some color balance and maybe a texture for the final.
Can you guys please critique me on something specific? On the last few critiques I've got, a consistent theme is that my foreground details are a bit "ham fisted". Really not sure how to address that because I was purposely not trying to over illustrate and detract from the focal point. But it sounds like that wasn't the right approach, so I'm really trying to be intentional about not doing that and spent a lot more time on those front details.
Any feedback would be appreciated!
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@jdubz my only concern is her hand. Her wrist almost looks broken. But I also like it because it looks like its flapping in the wind. I think it wors overall but some people may not like it.
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@chrisaakins The one on the right you mean? I bet pivoting it to the right might solve that even if it's just a little.
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@jdubz the arm closet to the board.
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Ok great thanks - I'll see how I can tweak it a bit!
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@jdubz I think the details look nicely balanced. If I were to add details it would be to your character at this point. It would also be really interesting to see you try texture. If you're interested Lee White has a YouTube video on how he does digital texture that's pretty great.
Also did you intentionally flip the moon so that the ends point away to the corner? I'm feeling a bit distracted by the moon like it's fighting to be a focal point. Might be because it's pointing away or too big or too bright? Just something to look at.
Overall it's looking really nice and polished! Kinda wonky in a fun and intentional way
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@jdubz Hey Josh - this is looking cool - i loved your January Piece!! super nice - you are way better with color than i am so i hope you will forgive my crude attempt but i did have a couple things that would be easier if i tried to show them - i think that this would be a 3 point perspective is the main thing - i am sorry i am chiming in so late since you asked about the perspective a couple of times - i really feel like the eye level is so low it would have to be three point and the diving figure seems to be drawn in three point also - tilting the ladder dramatically back seems to do the trick - was also wondering what it would look like with less action besides the diver and no moon too - the the moon is so commanding it is hard to look away from it - lastly i was wondering about lighting the bottom of the face and the top differently might be cool thing to do on this piece - my attempt is quick and not too well done but i think it does seem interesting - anyways...could be wrong on this stuff..very nice piece
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@Kevin-Longueil Thanks for the feedback Kevin, I appreciate it! I'll see what I can do to the ladder. My main initial idea is I wanted it to feel a lot higher. Maybe I can try and fold it back a bit. You might be right about the moon.
@carlianne Yeah I did intentionally switch the moon because I was thinking the light from the sun wouldn't be reflected on the other side. Maybe that's detracting and it's less important to be accurate?
I think I've seen that same video from Lee about texture and I've got a huge amount of textures I can play with. I use it a lot in my day job, so maybe that's why I'm resisting use it a lot here hah.
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Maybe just a super diminished moon comparatively that's turned back around so it points back to her?
