Society of Visual Storytelling

    SVSLearn Forums

    • Register
    • Login
    • Search
    • Recent
    • Tags
    • Popular
    • Users
    • Groups
    • Search

    Critiques welcome

    Artwork
    6
    11
    349
    Loading More Posts
    • Oldest to Newest
    • Newest to Oldest
    • Most Votes
    Reply
    • Reply as topic
    Log in to reply
    This topic has been deleted. Only users with topic management privileges can see it.
    • EliaMurrayArt
      EliaMurrayArt last edited by

      one - this is quite beautiful. I absolutely love how you handled the sheep's wool, and how you lose detail as you move through the background.

      I think the first thing though that jumps out to me is that the two characters don't seem to live in the same realm as the rest of the piece. Meaning, the whole piece is this amazing, textural experience and then you have two very flat characters that are relying on lines and flat colors.

      Now perhaps this is purposeful? Is it for a video game? Or something like that? If not, then I might suggest spending a little more time on the characters to make them feel like they are more similarly styled to the rest of the painting.

      It's like - I look at those sheep, and I can feel that you just had a blast making their wool. but then the characters, feel like they weren't given as much joy/expression? If that makes sense.

      As for the background I think perhaps messing around with the values would be great. Currently they are of very close color/value throughout. I think if they got pushed a bit more, especially in the middle back hills. If you darkened and muted them more you would get even more atmosphere between your characters/foreground and the middle hills. Then you could brighten your characters so they would also pop more! When I squint at your image as it is now - I see the clouds and the middle hills first because they are the lightest areas.

      Here's your image in black and white so you can really see the values.

      f04caaa5-19bc-4307-bf82-cf02a1b7fd8e-image.png

      Anyways. It is really lovely - those are the things that are standing out to me though.

      Instagram: https://www.instagram.com/eliamurrayart/
      Portfolio: www.eliamurray.com

      yuriqart 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
      • TessaW
        TessaW last edited by TessaW

        This is really gorgeous! I think there are very subtle tweaks that could be made. If we are taking cues from Ghibli, putting in some cooler tones into the shadows of the rock dude and making the upper portion of the sky darker would give it a little bit more depth. I would also think about making the skin tone of the boy just a little warmer to contrast with the background fields and have him relate more to the area he's standing in.

        Website: www.tessawrathall.com

        Instagram: www.instagram.com/tessawrathall_art/

        yuriqart 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
        • yuriqart
          yuriqart @EliaMurrayArt last edited by

          @EliaMurrayArt thank you very much for the feedback, the characters are purposely just like the ghibli studios films, a mix of painting and manga, I will do exactly like you said.

          1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
          • yuriqart
            yuriqart @TessaW last edited by

            @TessaW yes, I'm doing this drawing and watching the ghibli studio films, thanks got you feedback

            1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
            • W
              wolfieap last edited by

              Love the colors and overall feel of the piece. I agree with Elia that the values of the middle ground just behind the volcano are actually quite high contrast. I would knock back the values so they are lighter and lower contrast. This should have the extra benefit of increasing the contast of the characters who are sitting in front of them. The dark wavy grass behind the child could be lightened too as they are merging with their sillohette making it less clear.
              Is the focus the volcanic explosion? If so I would line up the child's arm with it (bit low at the moment) and have the clouds swirl around it (rather than below it) to draw attention? If you lowered the height of the mountain this would work. You could also have the fence draw a line towards it rather than bend to the left hand corner and make the path line towards it rather than to the left. All should guide the eye to the focus of the piece.
              I would love to see it if you do make any changes. Keep up the great work.

              yuriqart 1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
              • yuriqart
                yuriqart @wolfieap last edited by

                @wolfieap thank you so much

                1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                • ?
                  A Former User @yuriqart last edited by

                  @yuriqart Can you try taking the fence out and cropping the image? I don't know if it would work, but as a viewer, I really would like to get close to the two characters. It feels like the fence is only there to keep me separate from them.

                  j.sienkowski yuriqart 3 Replies Last reply Reply Quote 1
                  • j.sienkowski
                    j.sienkowski @Guest last edited by

                    @carolinedrawing I agree. I feel like the fence doesn't compositionally serve a purpose and because is running parallel to the viewer it flattens the bottom section of an otherwise very depth-full looking piece.

                    www.instagram.com/jsienkowski
                    www.jtsienkowski.com

                    1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                    • yuriqart
                      yuriqart @Guest last edited by

                      @carolinedrawing yeah , it’s way better,thanks a lot

                      1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 0
                      • yuriqart
                        yuriqart @Guest last edited by

                        @carolinedrawing BD3500DE-15E8-4673-9DC4-71A0EA06DB16.png

                        1 Reply Last reply Reply Quote 1
                        • First post
                          Last post