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    • Ace Connell
      Ace Connell last edited by

      Phenomenal draftsmanship. On the point of composition, I'd just be careful that the trunk of the one closer to the camera doesn't get a bit lost against the other one's back and it possibly could create a tangent looking like a part of the ears/spine/whatever on the other one.

      Great work though. Really appealing

      Ace

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      • joanie stone
        joanie stone @Ace Connell last edited by

        @Ace-Connell Good point. I plan on making the values of the two elephants different enough that it will be clear which elephant is which but I will keep your suggestion in mind while painting. Thanks everyone for your feedback.

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        • mattramsey
          mattramsey @joanie stone last edited by

          @joanie-stone Could one of them be holding a feather (as a nod to Disney's Dumbo)?

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          • joanie stone
            joanie stone last edited by joanie stone

            Here is a cleaned-up sketch. Feedback welcome before I start painting. Thanks.

            santas_ride_sketch.jpg

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            • Dulcie
              Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

              It looks fantastic and I'm sure this is going to be a beautiful finished piece. The one thing that I wonder about, is maybe you could push Santa's expression a little bit - at the moment it looks quite neutral and I'm not sure what he is thinking...(happy? excited? having trouble with the elephants? or all pretty good?) Whereas I'm pretty sure those elephants are having a great time!

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              • Lee Holland
                Lee Holland last edited by

                These elephants look great Joanie

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                • Chris Perry
                  Chris Perry @joanie stone last edited by

                  @joanie-stone I like it. The elephants really have a drawn through shape.

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                  • bharris
                    bharris last edited by

                    I like your light/organic feel in your drawing! Very sweet!

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                    • Lee White
                      Lee White SVS Team SVS Instructor Pro SVS OG last edited by Lee White

                      very nice Joanie! I love your concept and your expressions on the elephants make them look so sweet! Really nice.

                      A few suggestions:

                      1. When posting a sketch or image with white as the background, always add a border (this goes for all of you!). The white space defines the compostion and it's hard to really see how the image is working when we can't see where the background ends (especially since the background of the forum is also white).

                      2. Once I added a border, you can see that your compostion is neatly divided into 4 quarters which may not be the best option. It's important at this stage to really think about rhythm and flow and all the other little compositional details without getting lost in the subject matter (which isn't easy to do).

                      3. After seeing the image divided into quarters, I chose to mess around with a more dynamic design. Feel free to discard it if you like, it's just a sample of what you can do to add interest to the image. I chose a tall vertical format which I really like. It seemed like it needed some other imagery to balance it, so I thought it might be cool to see the top of some houses. I also added two more elephants which adds more flow and allows for some cool cropping (which I'm a big fan of).

                      I banked his sleigh a bit more to make it seem like it's "leaning" into the corner and then changed the presents to be falling out the back in that direction as well.

                      Hope that helps. Let me know if you have any questions or concerns with it. It's a great image and I can't wait to see where you take it! : )

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                      • carlossketches
                        carlossketches @Lee White last edited by

                        @Lee-White Great composition tips and techniques!! I'll use this feedback in my own work. Thank you

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                        • Naroth Kean
                          Naroth Kean last edited by

                          the elephant idea is very adorable XD

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                          • joanie stone
                            joanie stone last edited by

                            Ahh, I wish I had seen Lee's critique before I submitted this one. He had some awesome ideas. Ayways, here's the finished piece but I may go back and incorporate Lee's ideas just for my own sake. Thanks everyone.

                            santas_ride_small.jpg

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                            • bharris
                              bharris last edited by

                              @joanie-stone I love the color scheme you used in this. the whole thing has a wonderful vintage feel to it! I agree with what Lee was saying, but this works for a stand alone piece! Great job!

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                              • mattramsey
                                mattramsey last edited by

                                Those colors are beautiful

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                                • Dulcie
                                  Dulcie SVS OG last edited by

                                  It's beautiful, I love the way you paint in that vintage-yet-defined style. Really nice!

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                                  • Stephanie Hider
                                    Stephanie Hider last edited by

                                    Love the color scheme. the green is lovely.

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