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    • Meghan Burch
      Meghan Burch last edited by

      I was going to suggest moving the sword as well. One more thing I'd add about the character - I think her sword am should be slightly bent. A relaxed pose would have a bend in the arm. OR - Maybe even better- what if the character's pose mimics the pose of the warrior princess. It would make for a more dynamic composition and the reason for the scene would be even more clear. Good luck!

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      • Matthew Oberdier
        Matthew Oberdier last edited by

        Are those lanterns lit? I would make them the brightest thing in the scene.

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        • MichaelMattocks
          MichaelMattocks @Elisa Miko Price last edited by

          @Elisa-Miko-Price I agree. The light seems intense so maybe the design is actually "magically" bright and that's whats casting the light on her would bring it in.

          Michael Mattocks
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          • MichaelMattocks
            MichaelMattocks last edited by

            another suggestion is either make the stone wall go into the dark or make the stones get closer together. or make the lines just blur out. Seems like a lot of detail in a nonfocused area. also The pillar against the wall I think the base should line up against the wall. The top seems flat against the wall and the bottom seems like there is a space

            Michael Mattocks
            Https://instagram.com/mattocksdesign/

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            • Stephen Dueck
              Stephen Dueck @MichaelMattocks last edited by

              @MichaelMattocks Yeah that third board was supposed to be a baseboard but I will just get rid of it.

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              • Stephen Dueck
                Stephen Dueck last edited by

                Thank you all so much for the suggestions. Here is the piece with the edits and a sketch of the tapestry. If you see anything else that seems off please let me know!!F0287744-4ADA-42D3-AE0B-81309A38EEAA.jpeg

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                • Kevin Longueil
                  Kevin Longueil SVS OG @Stephen Dueck last edited by

                  @Stephen-Dueck this is looking great - for me I’m thinking the sword is not necessary and is very focal at the moment. I would love to see it without the sword and with the puppy version of the beast at her side that is in the tapestry instead... I think that would be more effective in showing that the character in the tapestry is also the little girl. Possibly having a slight gesture to her pose might be good too - she is very straight up and down at the moment - really nice piece!

                  Portfolio: kevinlongueil.com
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                  • Stephen Dueck
                    Stephen Dueck @Kevin Longueil last edited by

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                    • Stephen Dueck
                      Stephen Dueck @Stephen Dueck last edited by

                      @Stephen-Dueck I completely understand what you are saying. The lady in the tapestry is actually the girls mom and I wanted to give her the sword to clearly show that she wants to become a warrior when she grows up. Thanks for the input tho!

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                      • Stephen Dueck
                        Stephen Dueck last edited by

                        Here is the final piece! Thank you so much for all your input. I can see how valuable this community is. I look forward to learning more from you all.9F023631-7CAD-4571-8109-B21F66B27AEE.jpeg

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