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    Idea Sketch: feedback appreciated

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    • hakepe
      hakepe last edited by

      Made a few alterations to the sketch.

      huhtikuu_on_kuukausista_julmin3_sketch2_web.jpg

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      • KayPotter
        KayPotter last edited by

        What a super neat idea!
        I love the addition of the woman with the watering can. And opening the window on the right. It makes me want the middle guy to have something too... a cat? A book? A pipe? A spilling cup of tea?
        I love the size of the reaper.

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        • Jacy13
          Jacy13 @hakepe last edited by

          @hakepe I really love this illustration already! Such an awesome concept. The only thing I notice is that the characters in the windows all blend into the background value wise. I'm thinking that is intentional; as not to bring too much focus on them, but I thought I would put that out there just in case you wanted them to pop out slightly from the background. I love your grim reaper character! 😃

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          • J
            jdubz last edited by

            @hakepe Ohh yeah I really like where that took it. I think the only thing I wish I could see more was the expression of the middle guy. I don't know if I'd sacrifice his shape though - the tapered mouth is really dynamic. Maybe its just the line weight that could be thinned out so we could see it better?

            I agree with @Jacy13 - I wasn't sure if this was the final values version. Since the reaper is the only dark thing on the entire piece, I'd say if you darkened the areas behind the characters on the inside that would really pop everyone off the page and create a lot more dynamic range.

            Josh White
            https://www.instagram.com/joshwhiteillustration/

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            • Matthew Oberdier
              Matthew Oberdier last edited by

              I would add way more drooping flowers to hit us over the head with the trail of death idea.

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              • Simonpeterpaul
                Simonpeterpaul @hakepe last edited by

                @hakepe I really love it, so so much.

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                • hakepe
                  hakepe last edited by

                  Thank you everyone for your feedback and advice. This is what I ended up with.

                  huhtikuu_on_kuukausista_julmin4_web.jpg

                  Illustrator & Visual Artist
                  https://hakepe.myportfolio.com/

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                  • K.Flagg
                    K.Flagg last edited by

                    This a great piece! I love the death design and the colors are really good.

                    K.Flagg

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                      Mari1-9Munive last edited by

                      Ohhh I really love that you made that little one distracting with that butterfly, something like he didn't even notice that he is cutting all the flowers, that makes his so Innocent and cute, also I love that you end up changing the position of the old woman cause the 3 in the first sketch looks like statues, really a lovely work x3

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                      • hakepe
                        hakepe last edited by

                        Thank you @K-Flagg . I am glad that adding the butterfly gave the effect that I wanted @Mari1-9Munive This character is starting to have a life of it's own in my head, I think I am going to make some more paintings with him, maybe even a story or a comic. I have a couple of ideas in mind.

                        Illustrator & Visual Artist
                        https://hakepe.myportfolio.com/

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