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    WIP Albert the Beaver's first day at school, feedback please!

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      Frogpunzel last edited by

      Hey Everyone,
      Here is my sketch work for this months prompt. Any feedback would be fabulous, before I move onto the next step! Thanks!
      first day of school sketch 1.jpg

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        Heather Boyd @Frogpunzel last edited by

        @Frogpunzel Hi, would you like feedback specifically on what you've done or interested in maybe playing around with viewpoint and perspective? I would go back and do some more thumbnails, both characters are also the same weight/importance so I am not 100% sure which one is the main character Albert (could be the one freaky out or the one comforting).

        Also if this is meant as a spread (across 2 pages) I would also consider where the text of the story would go (you'll want to give ample room for that -good practice).

        I do like your character's expressions, I think those have come across well!

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          Frogpunzel @Heather Boyd last edited by

          @Heather-Boyd Thank you for the feedback! I think I will try and play with the perspective a little to see if I can bring the main character more to the front or put him as more of a focal point. This is not meant to be a two page spread, I just liked my duck and had a lot of trouble with the beaver. I had to cover up that side of the page to start over on him. I'm new to this and really appreciate your thoughts. Thanks!

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