feedback requested for poor Yoily the Boily
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is this looking better yet?? -
anyone has more feedback?
taa -
Maybe the smoke should be without outlines and renders a little more 3D
Mic
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Hi Leah!
Congrats on landing your first paid gig! That's such an exciting milestone! Could we get a little more information on the project? What will the illustration be used for? Ex: a flier, a logo, an animation, etc. What point does the gas company want to get across? Did they provide any documentation as to what they wanted? I absolutely love the expression on this poor character, lol!
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so they are running a series of adverts, and this will be used on an advert promoting boiler repairs.
something abt the perspective of the screen looks a teeny bit off...am i right?
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@leah Hi Leah,
Well done for getting a job!
I did a rough paint over, just to enhance the values a bit. So there's more shadow on the left side of Yoily. I've filled in the steam clouds on the left so they read quicker (although they could be a bit brighter still), and added a bit of shading to the top pipe so it is consistent with the light direction from the bottom pipes. Also added a tiny bit of shadow to the plaster (band aid). Hope that gives you some ideas. Sorry I can't help with the rest.
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@leah hi Leah congratulations and sorry I have no idea on the money side but think your second version is better with the added rendering. Just one thing though the smoke puffs are like speech bubbles - which may be your intention but would more of a thought bubble with the little bubbles leading to it read better as smoke also maybe changing their sizes to less uniform.
I think it’s great though and hope they pay you lots.
Cheers
Helen -
@leah also 3drips is better than four unless u r in Japan!
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hey adam thanks for your time and advice!
that looks real great, thank you.
i shall use your ideas, they do enhance the image.-leah
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i do hear what your saying abt the smoke...however i think i like the pointy sharp bits leading to them coz it just looks more explosive that way
