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    To blur or not to blur (with poll)?

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    • KathrynAdebayo
      KathrynAdebayo last edited by KathrynAdebayo

      Hi Jeremiah! This concept is so funny and awesome. I love the cute little monster on the map. 🙂

      Here are some thoughts in case they’re helpful, but of course follow your own gut if these suggestions seem off to you.

      First of all, I really like how you hid the monster behind the rock. I think that was a great move, and the most recent version where his face is showing more looks great to me. I actually like the compass more. The flame draws your eye immediately instead of letting the story of the monster and the map take center stage.

      As for lighting, I think your night scene values look really good. It’s not too bright in my opinion. What might give you more of a night time feel, I think, is saturation. You know when you’re outside at night and everything almost looks black and white? I threw a blue filter over your background to give an example.

      As for the hands and map, there could easily be some off scene lighting illuminating them, so their brightness doesn’t bother me.

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      Hope this is helpful. Thanks for sharing the progress of your piece for others to learn from along side you.

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      • Jeremiahbrown
        Jeremiahbrown last edited by

        @KathrynAdebayo Thanks so much for the feedback! I think the filter is a great idea. Back to the drawing board🙂

        Jeremiah Brown
        www.jeremiahbrownillustration.com
        https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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        • Jeremiahbrown
          Jeremiahbrown last edited by

          I'll stop flooding the forum after this but here are the next 2 iterations based on suggestions. Thanks again!!
          monster39.jpg
          monster38.jpg

          Jeremiah Brown
          www.jeremiahbrownillustration.com
          https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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          • Matthew Oberdier
            Matthew Oberdier @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

            @Jeremiahbrown I like the torch version, it really sells the illumination of the map.

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            • theprairiefox
              theprairiefox last edited by

              I wonder if you tried the torch version but desaturating the stuff in the background? I think it would make the map pop even more and make it truly feel like night?

              You are getting close! It is looking great.

              -The Prairie Fox
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              • Jeremiahbrown
                Jeremiahbrown last edited by Jeremiahbrown

                @Matthew-Oberdier and @theprairiefox Thank you and here's are two tweaks as recommended.
                monster40.jpg

                monster41.jpg

                Jeremiah Brown
                www.jeremiahbrownillustration.com
                https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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                • Heather Boyd
                  Heather Boyd last edited by

                  I can see why you did the blur but it rather disorients me. I think if you adjusted the value of the back ground because it feels like it's at the same intensity as the foreground character.

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                  • LouD
                    LouD last edited by

                    Your painterly style is so fun! I think the warm/cool color palette you chose looks really good for a night scene. It’s been great to see all the different versions you’ve been working on. I agree with Heather, I think the values are making it hard to separate the monster from the rocks.
                    For reference for a jungle night scene, I looked up screenshots from Moana:
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                    In your painting, the rocks have details that range from nearly white to nearly black. I think you can get away with much lower contrast. I hope you don’t mind I did a quick paint over of your latest version:
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                    I used the eyedrop color picker tool to select the sky color. Then I did a layer of flat color over everything that wasn’t the hands or the monster, and made the layer transparent. On the bottom is a grayscale comparison, left is the original, right is the paint-over.

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                    • Jeremiahbrown
                      Jeremiahbrown @LouD last edited by

                      @LouD Wow, thanks a lot! That does look better.

                      Jeremiah Brown
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                      • chrisaakins
                        chrisaakins @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                        @Jeremiahbrown I love the scene with the backdrop toned down.
                        I am going to be a naysayer here. I think the torch makes everything cramped. It also creates three large objects on the page which all compete with each other: the torch, the monster, and the map. And then the fact is the brightest thing on the page makes it even more of a competitive element. My vote would be to delete the torch and go with the lighting dimmed out on the rocks.

                        Looks good!

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                        • Jeremiahbrown
                          Jeremiahbrown @chrisaakins last edited by

                          @chrisaakins Ha, I like your naysayerness! 😋 In light of that I made another version (I'll stop soon!). Still distracting?

                          monster42.jpg

                          Jeremiah Brown
                          www.jeremiahbrownillustration.com
                          https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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                          • LauraA
                            LauraA SVS OG @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                            @Jeremiahbrown I think this last version is about right!

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                            • J
                              jdubz last edited by jdubz

                              Looks great! Cool to see the evolution.

                              What happens if you blur the foreground instead of the background like you were initially thinking? I don't know what the end focus is supposed to be, so this might not be applicable. But I had thought since the foreground is so close, visually you won't lose any of what we'd be looking at, but it'd be super clear you're supposed to see the monster first.

                              Josh White
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                              • blamillo
                                blamillo last edited by

                                Hi @Jeremiahbrown. Nice work iterating on this! I'm chiming in because I've had to paint a few night scenes recently.

                                I think the separation of values is what's going to really sell things and guide the viewer's eye here. Overall, my feeling is it's still much too bright and saturated to be convincing, and with so many bright values it's hard to know where to look first. You should be very sparing with things that approach 90-100% brightness and over 50% saturation in lighting situations like this. I've done a quick paintover of my own to demonstrate a few things - apologies for butchering your work!

                                It's easy to forget that the entire night sky is a source of light too, so it should be far from the darkest thing in your image. It doesn't need much adjustment itself - most of the effect here comes from bringing down the values of the background so it looks brighter by comparison.

                                I've been a little heavy-handed darkening the background and midground, but I think this is around the value range you should be looking at. It's going to be receiving weak cold light from the entire sky, and a slightly stronger cool light from...the moon out of frame, or an aurora, maybe? Same goes with our monster buddy. He's receiving a little more ambient light, but not enough to lift any of his values above the 70-80 range. I haven't spent long on preserving highlights, but remember to keep contrast on them subtle - probably no more than a 10-20% variation in brightness. All of the darkening I've done with a blue-grey brush on a Multiply layer, about 20% saturation and 30-40% brightness.

                                Regarding the flame - as the primary light source it'll obviously be the brightest thing in the image. But it's a really weak light, and it's not going to reach very far at all. Inverse square law, y'know. You could still go for a few warm highlights on the leaves in the midground, but less is more in this case, I reckon.

                                Anyhow, that's just how I'd approach it, for what it's worth. Best of luck! jbrownpaintover.jpg

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                                • demotlj
                                  demotlj SVS OG last edited by

                                  @Jeremiahbrown I agree with @blamillo and the draw-over regarding lighting. I've been following this thread and every time you desaturated the monster and accentuated the values difference, I thought it got better but I kept thinking it could be pushed even farther. The whole composition is so great and I think having the monster and the map really stand out as the focal point by darkening the rest as @blamillo did gives the viewer a real feel for the story.

                                  Laurie DeMott
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                                  • Jeremiahbrown
                                    Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                                    Thanks so much for all of the feedback! Thank you for honest and helpful criticism. I so appreciate that. @blamillo I really like what you did with the image (and also the time you took to explain it!). That was really kind and made a huge difference. I'm going to implement those changes...tomorrow, haha. I've overcooked this image and need to get away from it for a bit😄

                                    Jeremiah Brown
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                                    https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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                                    • TessaW
                                      TessaW last edited by

                                      It was fun watching the feedback on this one! Learned a lot from it.

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                                      • chrisaakins
                                        chrisaakins @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                                        @Jeremiahbrown I agree with @LauraA This one looks great! That was a perfect way to solve your problem.

                                        Chris Akins
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                                        • Jeremiahbrown
                                          Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                                          @TessaW that's great to hear that you're learning from the community via this image! Some really impressive thoughts and suggestions! Thanks @chrisaakins!
                                          I ended up implementing what @blamillo and @demotlj were suggesting but I didn't want to make it too dark and tried to find that balance between believable enough and not too horror. The focus is supposed to be on the real monster in the background contrasted with the happy monster and the star on the map the idea being that the adventurer thought it'd be an easy trip to the star but realizes he was quite wrong! I know most people seemed to like the lighter but I was enjoying the torch so I made a version with that. Thanks again for all of the critiques, it's been really great! IMG_1407.JPG

                                          monster44.jpg

                                          Jeremiah Brown
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                                          https://www.instagram.com/jeremiah.brownillustration/

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                                          • TessaW
                                            TessaW last edited by TessaW

                                            While I love how this turned out, I just wanted to give a shout out to your earlier version. Yes it was bright and busy, but I really liked the fun pay off seeing the cute simple version on the map and then seeing the real version, almost identical in color and silhouette, but way creepier! I This latest version, has a better pay off in terms of menacing and creepiness. Love both versions- well done!

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