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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos @Joel Gómez Gallego last edited by Asyas_illos

      @joel-gómez-gallego the only thing that I can see, is that the pumas face seems a little more cartoony compared everything else, a little out of place too me. This really great watercolors though!

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      • Joel Gómez Gallego
        Joel Gómez Gallego @Asyas_illos last edited by

        @asyas_illos im actually cheating at watercolors a bit, using staedler's karat watercolor pencils for texture and details.

        As for the mistakes that bug me, i mainly dislike that i couldn't achieve consistency with the values and the light source. Also that the perspective and composition ended up looking wonky. And last, i can't stop seeing the "cicada" as a giant cockroach.

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        • freddiesmith
          freddiesmith @Joel Gómez Gallego last edited by

          @joel-gómez-gallego hey was thinking back wheel on jeep out of place I would put bit further back but this piece is class 👍

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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos @Joel Gómez Gallego last edited by

            @joel-gómez-gallego I personally really like this it looks like something you’d see in a kids magazine. I Do see what you mean about values and I think maybe if you adjust the green area that is on the side of the Jeep closest to us it will help to sort it out a little, are you open to me doing a little draw over?

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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Joel-Gómez-Gallego also sometimes wonky can work in your favor😉

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              • Joel Gómez Gallego
                Joel Gómez Gallego @Asyas_illos last edited by

                @asyas_illos plz do, thank you very much.

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos @Joel Gómez Gallego last edited by Asyas_illos

                  @joel-gómez-gallego 33A92F1B-593F-4CDB-BD3D-C8AAF1BA48BE.jpeg
                  so I basically just lightened up the background and darkened the foreground. I also adjusted the sizes of the cicada and the sloth since they are on the same tree the scale seemed a bit off. I highlighted the iguana too. And adjusted the puma eyes, sorry! 😉 but I think with just lighting changes that really helps separate the different levels in your illustration. Hope the adjustments I made help you!

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                  • Joel Gómez Gallego
                    Joel Gómez Gallego @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @asyas_illos thanks!! It certainly changes a lot with those adjustments. I should start learning some digital editing to improve thevoutput of my stuff. Gonna actually save your edit as reference, thanks a lot.

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos last edited by

                      @joel-gómez-gallego glad I could help☺️

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                      • Peter Anton
                        Peter Anton last edited by

                        I would reconsider the positioning of the heads of the animals. They are currently posing for the picture, looking right at the camera, which creates a self-conscious image. That's fine if what you're going for is a first person perspective, where the animals notice us as we enter the jungle. However, they are all framing the Jeep, which suggests that the picture is about the jeep. So what do you want your story to be about? Is it about the vehicle driving through or is it about the viewer? Why are the animals looking at me instead of the car? Why aren't there any animals except for the ones in the foreground? What's mostly lacking for me is that clarity of: what is this image ABOUT? Who is the main character? Where do you want the viewer to look, and how do you want them to feel?

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