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    • joosterwijk
      joosterwijk last edited by

      Hi everyone!
      I have been working on the March contest and was wondering if my story is too complicated. I want it to be clear but also raise certain questions or at least curiosity. Should I avoid this or does it work in this illustration?

      Lucky 2 kopie.jpg

      So the central question here is: Who is the lucky one? It is to the viewer to decide.
      Thanks! Oh and all kind of remarks are welcome of course.

      https://joosterwijk.nl/
      https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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      • NicolaSchofield
        NicolaSchofield @joosterwijk last edited by

        @joosterwijk "who is the lucky one?" Is exactly what I thought when I looked at it so it works for that 👍🏻😀

        Nicola Schofield

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        • Catherine
          Catherine @joosterwijk last edited by

          @joosterwijk Oo! I love this! It tells two separate stories and I'm invested. I feel like the only thing I would suggest you play around with is the way your use of value is leading the story. When I look at the picture as a whole, I notice the cat first every time because of how dark it is and then look up to see what the cat is looking at. I think it you made the cat blend into the background, you'd see the bird and his open cage first and think "Yay! He's free! Oh wait.." Which might be the emotional arc you're wanting to take us on? Can't wait to see this finished!

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          • Griffin McPherson
            Griffin McPherson @joosterwijk last edited by

            @joosterwijk not too complicated at all, I think it’s a great concept!

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            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos last edited by

              Not complicated! This is great very interesting turn of events! Great job

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              • AngelinaKizz
                AngelinaKizz last edited by

                Oh I love this! I love that it has so many layers to the story and the eye is pulled from the cat to the bird.

                I do agree that if the cat were lighter in value than the bird, you’d see him second and get the uhoh of the story more clearly. Maybe a blonde/golden cat and a yellow canary?

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                  ThomCharles last edited by

                  I like the unknown element…if there was a moment of eye contact between the bird and cat it would add to the tension. I also like how the other birds are watching like the viewer…

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                  • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                    Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @joosterwijk last edited by

                    @joosterwijk hehe 😂 i like the ironic story of this piece

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                    • Holumpa
                      Holumpa @joosterwijk last edited by

                      @joosterwijk I think the deeper the storytelling the better as long as it is readable to your target audience. And I think this one is really well done!

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                      • KatrinaF
                        KatrinaF last edited by

                        It's very clear and makes me wonder what will come next. Love the 3 birds smooched together in obvious curiosity knowing the cat is there. I say go for it!

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                        • joosterwijk
                          joosterwijk @NicolaSchofield last edited by

                          @NicolaSchofield @Griffin @Asyas_illos @Nyrryl-Cadiz @Holumpa @KatrinaF Thank you all! It is good to know it does not only work in my head. Thanks!

                          https://joosterwijk.nl/
                          https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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                          • joosterwijk
                            joosterwijk @Catherine last edited by

                            @Catherine Thanks! That is a good idea. The main focus is now indeed on the cat, but the other way around is better!

                            https://joosterwijk.nl/
                            https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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                            • joosterwijk
                              joosterwijk @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                              @AngelinaKizz Thanks Angelina, I’m going to play around with the colours, see if I can make it work.

                              https://joosterwijk.nl/
                              https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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                              • Asyas_illos
                                Asyas_illos @joosterwijk last edited by Asyas_illos

                                @joosterwijk I came back for more! this composition is just so good! My eyes actually go to the bird first because all those birdcages, it’s really striking to me. But it’s also great how you have the contrast between the cat and its background. Really love this piece!

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                                • joosterwijk
                                  joosterwijk @ThomCharles last edited by

                                  @ThomCharles Thanks! In my first sketches I had them looking at each other, but I couldn’t get the birds yes-I-am-free feeling enough. I also now miss the tension, thanks for pointing it out, I’ll try to get it back 🙂

                                  https://joosterwijk.nl/
                                  https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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                                  • joosterwijk
                                    joosterwijk @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    @Asyas_illos Thanks Asya! I will try not to screw it up 😅

                                    https://joosterwijk.nl/
                                    https://www.instagram.com/joosterwijk.illustration/

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                                    • NicolaSchofield
                                      NicolaSchofield @joosterwijk last edited by

                                      @joosterwijk I love that the bird is obliviously happy. He's just there thinking, Yes! I'm the luckiest bird in the world!

                                      Nicola Schofield

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                                      • TessaW
                                        TessaW last edited by

                                        I'm a little late to the party, but wanted to chime in and say that I love the concept and got it right away! I think you should definitely go with it.

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                                        • Larue
                                          Larue last edited by

                                          Concept read very well and love all those super cute Birdies!

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                                          • Johanna Kim
                                            Johanna Kim SVS OG @joosterwijk last edited by

                                            @joosterwijk The concept is clear in that luck is relative and fleeting. Right now, my eye bounces back and forth between the cat to the main bird. I would suggest when you try to make one of them clearly the main focus by adjusting value and your choice of color.

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