Illustration critique
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Hi everyone,
Looking for comments to help improve my illustration. The scene is the boy is trying to play with his new friend but his friend is tied up and can't spread his wings. I intentionally hid his wings so it would be a nice reveal later on. Thanks in advance.
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@Solomon-Designs
Is this drawing going to have text with it? If it’s going to be part of a story, i can see it working, however without text the story isn’t clear. Why is he tied up? How do we know he has wings he can’t use? If you haven’t watched Wills developing visual stories, I’d highly recommend it and really flesh out the story first. I would also say that the light is too bright against the wall of the tent. -
@Solomon-Designs Very cute characters and I can see you're really trying to tell a story here. The thing that immediately jumps out at me is the light on the boy - I didn't realize that it was a flashlight tucked in his sweater, so I thought it was a light attached to his skin somehow... So I think that part needs a bit of work, just to make it clearer. Also it doesn't feel like your other character is tied up - I read it as: this guy has a lightly drapped ribbon around him and he doesn't quite know what to do with it. Hope to see the next phase of this!
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@AngelinaKizz Great advice and comments. I will definitely check out Wills developing visual stories. Thank you!
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@Kristen-Lango Thank you for your feedback. Good comments and I definitely have some changes to make. Thanks again!
