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    May Storm WIP by Tom Shannon

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      Robert Henderson @Guest last edited by

      @Tom-Shannon

      What a fun and playful concept. This takes me back to when I was a kid. I am really excited to watch as you dial this one in. Nicely done Tom!

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      • JessicaLinnEvans
        JessicaLinnEvans @Guest last edited by

        @Tom-Shannon YES! I love the improvements you made! The cat is better inside the box, and that fan is perfect! I think you did the right thing taking the picture off the wall, as it was distracting. Now you can focus on the triumphant "Onward!" point. And I heartily approve of the change of wardrobe. Looks great!

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        • JessicaLinnEvans
          JessicaLinnEvans @Guest last edited by

          @Tom-Shannon Oh! I was thinking now the age is unclear. When she was in footie-pajamas, she seemed very child-like, but the (awesome) turtleneck sweater and pants feel a bit older.

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            A Former User @JessicaLinnEvans last edited by

            @JessicaLinnEvans Hi Jessica! Thank you! Yes, the crit the other night was very helpful. I really like the fan idea! The group feedback was great! I agree with you, the age could be a little unclear with the new wardrobe. Hmmm, I'm on the fence about it. Good food for thought! Again, thank you for the feedback!!!

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            • Larue
              Larue last edited by

              Very cute concept. My only thought is that this child looks a little older than I would expect to be doing this (10-11), I think that just a slight downward shift in the eye placement, shorter nose could do the trick to bring the age down to 8-10 yrs? but....what do I know,just think back to when my son was younger.

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                A Former User @Larue last edited by

                @Larue Thank you, Larue! I was thinking the same thing about the age. I'm going to go back into and adjust a few things. The beauty of working digitally, easy to make edits!!

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                  A Former User @xin li last edited by

                  @xin-li Thank you for the feedback, Xin! I appreciate it. I like your idea! I'll play around some more with it.

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                  • Johanna Kim
                    Johanna Kim SVS OG @Guest last edited by

                    @Tom-Shannon Love this! I just have one note: The child's foot on the edge of the box--my eye gets stuck there a bit. What if you angled the box up at the front, so we can see the foot or socked foot clearly above the fan?

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                      A Former User @Robert Henderson last edited by

                      @Robert-Henderson Thank you so much Robert!! I appreciate the kind words!!!

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                        A Former User @Johanna Kim last edited by

                        @Johanna-Kim Good observations! Thanks the kind words and feedback Johanna!

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