Personal projects feedback please:|
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@Asyas_illos great job! I really struggled with learning how to builds mine through Wordpress, and now that I understand what I’m doing, it’s much easier to work with. I think the one thing I would vary up, is at the bottom you have a cluster of black and white images. I think I would shift them to be sprinkled throughout the colored pieces.
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@AngelinaKizz awesome thanks! Yes I’m not very good with computers in general and I was creating it with my iPad, so let’s just say it was my fifth attempt.
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@Asyas_illos oh man, me either! I find that it's easier going through the web browser rather than the app for WordPress. The app I was ripping my hair out. Are you using an app?
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@AngelinaKizz no it was web based still a major pain. I tried at first with square space only to find it wasn’t compatible with my iPad and I could not transfer any of my pictures, good grief!
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@Asyas_illos brutal!!! You've done a great job so far though
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@AngelinaKizz lol thanks
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@Asyas_illos I think your site looks good. It is good to have a site that starts with the gallery of illustrations, so people don’t have to search for it. I didn’t see anything that I would remove or rearrange, but I am also not a portfolio expert so I am not sure the best way to arrange things. The only thing I have heard is to put your best piece first. You have a lot of great pieces so it is hard to choose.
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@Asyas_illos Your website looks good. I agree that it's nice to have the gallery of images right away.
One thing that looks odd (at least on my browser) is that there's a bit of an image on the left side at the top (a leafy design & on the home page there's also a bit of a flower or wing or something, so it really looks cut off).
I would remove that image, or move it to make it visible.
Check the links at the top of the "About Me" page. None of them worked for me.
Also, I would recommend using a larger font size for your "About Me" info, as well as separate it into paragraphs. I think people are less likely to actually read it if it's all one big paragraph.
Breaking it up (something like this) could make it easier to view. (Also, please note some editing suggestions in red.):
"Hello! I’m Asya (pronounced Asia)
.I’m a freelance author/illustrator located in Northern California along with my husband and three children.I have been making art in one form or another for 35 years, (thinking back to watching Bob Ross with my grandma while making tiny fruits from clay). After re-reading my childhood favorites to my own children, I realized children’s literature was where I wanted to take my passion for art.
I’ve been studying online at the Society of Visual Storytelling while discovering and developing my style. I joined SCBWI in April 2022, and recently won the SF North and East Bay regional masthead update contest
.I love everything magical and whimsical. I also adore nature and animals. Let’s not forget fall and Halloween
!(It’s my favorite time of the year.) All of which I love bringing to my illustrations." -
@Asyas_illos hi! I love the simple design and how the illustrations are displayed, they are big enough to see them properly and small enough to create a nicely looking gallery
I would add some sequential art, since this is something most art directors are looking for.
And I don’t know why, but when I click on the about page, it will not allow me to click back on the home page or contact page.
Good luck, creating an online portfolio usually is a pain in the bee. I’m still working on mine, so…
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@mag it certainly is! I have really been struggling with it! Thanks for the feedback
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@Miriam thanks for the feedback on editing, I will look into it. I was hoping those darn things would be not be visible on the side I can’t for the life of me figure out how to delete the darn things so I tried just moving them as far off the page as I could lol
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@mag and yes the tabs are glitchy I don’t know why. If use the back button then choose again it will work but I don’t know what the deal is with that?!
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@Miriam if you have time can you please see if those images are still visible on the side of the page?
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@Asyas_illos I don’t see them anymore. Though I never noticed them the first time.
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@Asyas_illos Everything still looks the same.
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@Miriam not for me, maybe you need to refresh your browser history?
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@AngelinaKizz @Miriam are you using a desktop computer or a mobile device?
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@Asyas_illos in using the browser on my iPad.
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@AngelinaKizz ok I think it’s a desktop issue then cuz it doesn’t show for me either. So I found the way to delete it but unfortunately I need a key board lol. Looks like I’ll have to get the ole’ laptop out (long sigh)
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@Asyas_illos Hi! Just wanted to say that I took the time to read through this entire thread yesterday and today and I am so impressed with how your work is shaping up. I noticed your work already on Critique Arena, but this just confirms my opinion. And you're so fast! I have done my candy house design for Hansel and Gretel three times.
About your website: I am on Safari and still see the half flower motif. But Safari doesn't always play well with others. Good luck with your site. Looks great so far, and I was going to recommend Squarespace, but I'm sorry it doesn't work with your iPad. Do you have access to a Creative Cloud portfolio site? That could work and be cleaner than the Wix one. Or maybe there's a way to get rid of the Six banner. Just a thought.
Cheers!
