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    • jenn
      jenn last edited by

      I just love all of these ideas and it is great that you are revisiting them. I find that so difficult to do.

      So I'm just looking at the most recent post (Down the Rabbit Hole), just because the other images have some feedback already. My first thought is her hair should be streaming above her a little, or separating into more than one section, to indicate the tumbling movement. That would also let you show her left arm. Right now the arm is a little hidden by the hair. Also maybe her legs shouldn't be parallel, like her right leg could kick backward as if she is trying to 'swim' through the air toward the teacup. I like how you included a piano, because it is funny. The other objects look a little generic, and modern compared to Alice, wearing the apron and all. It would add interest if they had some antique-y shapes to them. Of course, it's a fun concept already, nonetheless I know you have the capability to push it and look forward to seeing where it goes ❤

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      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @jenn last edited by

        @jenn thanks for the feedback! Yes I plan on giving her a completely different gesture, so I’ll keep those things in mind. And I like the idea of older things, I didn’t think of that the first time. So far I’ve only done the background…
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        • Asyas_illos
          Asyas_illos last edited by

          I’m wondering if I can make it sort of an action sequence? What are your thoughts on this composition? I know it’s a bi crowded at the moment but once I color, some things will fade back like the bookcase.
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          • Asyas_illos
            Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos

            I went through and made brighter those that will be in the foreground
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            • kayleenartlover
              kayleenartlover @Asyas_illos last edited by

              @Asyas_illos with the autumn tree colors, I personally think pumpkinhead is a cute idea you don’t see too often. But maybe the others fill the space better, so I guess just pick your absolute favorite.

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              • Asyas_illos
                Asyas_illos @kayleenartlover last edited by

                @kayleenartlover thank you for the feedback! I had sort of put that on the back burner but I recently did some work on it and decided to go with Glinda, here’s an update on that one😊
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                • jenn
                  jenn @Asyas_illos last edited by

                  @Asyas_illos the action sequence could be a really interesting concept, and super challenging too.

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                  • Valerie Light
                    Valerie Light @Asyas_illos last edited by

                    @Asyas_illos Wow, Asya, you have really hit your stride, cranking out stylistically consistent and charming pieces. Super cute stuff!

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                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos @Valerie Light last edited by

                      @Valerie-Light thanks Valerie it’s been a long time in the making but I feel like I’ve made a breakthrough lately

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                      • Valerie Light
                        Valerie Light @Asyas_illos last edited by

                        @Asyas_illos man i get it. I think I'm in the middle of one myself!

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                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos last edited by

                          @Valerie-Light You’ve definitely come far! I think the first one of yours I remember was the yeti house, and you’ve really nailed down your style since then. Cheers to artistic growth! 😊

                          Here’s some progress on this one. Does it feel good compositionally? Color?
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                          • kayleenartlover
                            kayleenartlover @Asyas_illos last edited by

                            @Asyas_illos For the “Alice falling down the rabbit hole” colors, will you be adding more light later on some of the objects? It would definitely help bring some stuff to the foreground adding depth. Other than that I think the colors look great.

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                            • Asyas_illos
                              Asyas_illos @kayleenartlover last edited by

                              @kayleenartlover yes light I will do last

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                              • Valerie Light
                                Valerie Light @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                @Asyas_illos I'm not sure I'm on board with how you've cropped the top Alice. I wonder if you could make the piece even taller and narrower, and add blank space to the right or to the left, as an opportunity to show an art director that you can design with text in mind?

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                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos @Valerie Light last edited by

                                  @Valerie-Light thanks yes you’re right about that, I scaled her down to fit inside
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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos last edited by

                                    Moved some things around and changed it up a little I’m still working on the hair lol need to add bangs and headband
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                                    • jenn
                                      jenn @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                      @Asyas_illos I love the balance of larger shapes with little details. And the tumbling movement.

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                                      • Miriam
                                        Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by Miriam

                                        @Asyas_illos Nice textures in the Alice background — the linear pattern helps with the falling effect.

                                        I'd like to see her apron lifting up / flying away from the skirt of her dress in at least one pose (at least a corner pulling up or something). And maybe some apron strings / bow streaming behind her.

                                        Also, Alice is tumbling, but the objects are only tilted. Could you put one of the tea cups on its side? Maybe have a slice of cake that has come loose and floating / falling above the cake where it came out of it? I miss the chair from the earlier version (but I agree with the comment about antique styles).

                                        The overall style is adorable & I like the colors. That cake is so cute!

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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos @Miriam last edited by

                                          @Miriam thanks for the critique, I’ve done some work since my last visit and antiqued a few things like the lamp and teapot.

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                                          • Asyas_illos
                                            Asyas_illos last edited by

                                            Working on Alice’s hair face and gesture now
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