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  • Asyas_illos
    Asyas_illos last edited by Asyas_illos 12 Aug 2022, 04:14 12 Aug 2022, 04:14

    I went through and made brighter those that will be in the foreground
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    jenn 1 Reply Last reply 13 Aug 2022, 02:43 Reply Quote 2
    • kayleenartlover
      kayleenartlover @Asyas_illos last edited by 12 Aug 2022, 15:53

      @Asyas_illos with the autumn tree colors, I personally think pumpkinhead is a cute idea you don’t see too often. But maybe the others fill the space better, so I guess just pick your absolute favorite.

      Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply 12 Aug 2022, 18:27 Reply Quote 1
      • Asyas_illos
        Asyas_illos @kayleenartlover last edited by 12 Aug 2022, 18:27

        @kayleenartlover thank you for the feedback! I had sort of put that on the back burner but I recently did some work on it and decided to go with Glinda, here’s an update on that one😊
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        Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
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        https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

        Valerie Light 1 Reply Last reply 13 Aug 2022, 12:32 Reply Quote 3
        • jenn
          jenn @Asyas_illos last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 02:43

          @Asyas_illos the action sequence could be a really interesting concept, and super challenging too.

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          • Valerie Light
            Valerie Light @Asyas_illos last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 12:32

            @Asyas_illos Wow, Asya, you have really hit your stride, cranking out stylistically consistent and charming pieces. Super cute stuff!

            www.valerielightillustration.com
            www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

            Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply 13 Aug 2022, 13:48 Reply Quote 4
            • Asyas_illos
              Asyas_illos @Valerie Light last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 13:48

              @Valerie-Light thanks Valerie it’s been a long time in the making but I feel like I’ve made a breakthrough lately

              Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
              www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
              https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

              Valerie Light 1 Reply Last reply 13 Aug 2022, 15:08 Reply Quote 2
              • Valerie Light
                Valerie Light @Asyas_illos last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 15:08

                @Asyas_illos man i get it. I think I'm in the middle of one myself!

                www.valerielightillustration.com
                www.instagram.com/valerie_light_illustration

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                • Asyas_illos
                  Asyas_illos last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 15:14

                  @Valerie-Light You’ve definitely come far! I think the first one of yours I remember was the yeti house, and you’ve really nailed down your style since then. Cheers to artistic growth! 😊

                  Here’s some progress on this one. Does it feel good compositionally? Color?
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                  Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
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                  kayleenartlover Valerie Light 2 Replies Last reply 13 Aug 2022, 19:19 Reply Quote 0
                  • kayleenartlover
                    kayleenartlover @Asyas_illos last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 17:13

                    @Asyas_illos For the “Alice falling down the rabbit hole” colors, will you be adding more light later on some of the objects? It would definitely help bring some stuff to the foreground adding depth. Other than that I think the colors look great.

                    Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply 13 Aug 2022, 18:46 Reply Quote 1
                    • Asyas_illos
                      Asyas_illos @kayleenartlover last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 18:46

                      @kayleenartlover yes light I will do last

                      Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
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                      https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

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                      • Valerie Light
                        Valerie Light @Asyas_illos last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 19:19

                        @Asyas_illos I'm not sure I'm on board with how you've cropped the top Alice. I wonder if you could make the piece even taller and narrower, and add blank space to the right or to the left, as an opportunity to show an art director that you can design with text in mind?

                        www.valerielightillustration.com
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                        Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply 13 Aug 2022, 21:41 Reply Quote 0
                        • Asyas_illos
                          Asyas_illos @Valerie Light last edited by 13 Aug 2022, 21:41

                          @Valerie-Light thanks yes you’re right about that, I scaled her down to fit inside
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                          • Asyas_illos
                            Asyas_illos last edited by 14 Aug 2022, 03:39

                            Moved some things around and changed it up a little I’m still working on the hair lol need to add bangs and headband
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                            jenn Miriam 2 Replies Last reply 15 Aug 2022, 07:12 Reply Quote 3
                            • jenn
                              jenn @Asyas_illos last edited by 14 Aug 2022, 20:39

                              @Asyas_illos I love the balance of larger shapes with little details. And the tumbling movement.

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                              • Miriam
                                Miriam @Asyas_illos last edited by Miriam 15 Aug 2022, 07:15 15 Aug 2022, 07:12

                                @Asyas_illos Nice textures in the Alice background — the linear pattern helps with the falling effect.

                                I'd like to see her apron lifting up / flying away from the skirt of her dress in at least one pose (at least a corner pulling up or something). And maybe some apron strings / bow streaming behind her.

                                Also, Alice is tumbling, but the objects are only tilted. Could you put one of the tea cups on its side? Maybe have a slice of cake that has come loose and floating / falling above the cake where it came out of it? I miss the chair from the earlier version (but I agree with the comment about antique styles).

                                The overall style is adorable & I like the colors. That cake is so cute!

                                Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply 15 Aug 2022, 21:32 Reply Quote 0
                                • Asyas_illos
                                  Asyas_illos @Miriam last edited by 15 Aug 2022, 21:32

                                  @Miriam thanks for the critique, I’ve done some work since my last visit and antiqued a few things like the lamp and teapot.

                                  Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
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                                  • Asyas_illos
                                    Asyas_illos last edited by 15 Aug 2022, 21:32

                                    Working on Alice’s hair face and gesture now
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                                    Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
                                    www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
                                    https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

                                    Kristen Lango 1 Reply Last reply 16 Aug 2022, 21:20 Reply Quote 4
                                    • Kristen Lango
                                      Kristen Lango @Asyas_illos last edited by 16 Aug 2022, 21:20

                                      @Asyas_illos I'm really loving the motion in this Asya! One thing I might suggest would be to play with the sizing of the objects a bit more. Right now they are all reading as sort of the same size with the exception of the lamp... I might ask yourself which of these objects is particularly important in conveying what you're trying to say at this point in the story and then perhaps size that up and draw emphasis to it with light or contrast in color.

                                      The piece has great potential, but I do feel like the objects are making it a bit busy and I'm not really sure which one to look at first and why or which of them are important. Hope this helps! Great job with the poses of her falling and seeming confused - that reads well even without the expressions, so that's really well done!

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                                      Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply 16 Aug 2022, 23:41 Reply Quote 0
                                      • Asyas_illos
                                        Asyas_illos @Kristen Lango last edited by 16 Aug 2022, 23:41

                                        @Kristen-Lango thanks for the feedback! Once I finish everything I plan on going over with lighting and shadows some things will fade back and others forward. Hopefully it will appear less busy then!

                                        Here’s where I am at currently, just a few things left then I can start on lighting!
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                                        Asyasewardillos@gmail.com
                                        www.Instagram.com/asyas_illos/
                                        https://asyasewardillos.wixsite.com/mysite

                                        Heather Boyd jenn Pamela Fraley 3 Replies Last reply 20 Aug 2022, 20:20 Reply Quote 5
                                        • Heather Boyd
                                          Heather Boyd @Asyas_illos last edited by 17 Aug 2022, 00:57

                                          @Asyas_illos This is really great! The additional character poses really create the passage of time along with the actual passage down through the hole. And I love the rabbit wall art, little touches of the world she's entering with the world she's left.

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                                          Asyas_illos 1 Reply Last reply 17 Aug 2022, 01:24 Reply Quote 0
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