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    • AngelinaKizz
      AngelinaKizz @Jeremy Ross last edited by

      @Jeremy-Ross the redo feels much more professional. I like the texture, yet it's clean. I like the color palette as it let's the story come through better. The first, all I could see was the red.

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      • KevinTreaccar
        KevinTreaccar @Jeremy Ross last edited by

        @Jeremy-Ross I do like the updated values. Definitely reads much easier.

        I think I prefer the original’s red, though. Could you tweak the purple back to the original red? (Or yellow? Or combo?) I think that would warm up the intensity of the race.

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          Frogpunzel @Jeremy Ross last edited by

          @Jeremy-Ross Yes, I can see the characters much better in the second one!

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          • Chantal Goetheer
            Chantal Goetheer @Jeremy Ross last edited by

            @Jeremy-Ross I agree it's much easier to see the characters now. Really makes a big difference. I always do love colour though and missing that a bit. As @KevinTreaccar said the colours make it more intense. Because you've given the characters their own value maybe there is still space for those bright colours in the background/sun behind them?

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            • Jeremy Ross
              Jeremy Ross @AngelinaKizz last edited by

              Thank you @AngelinaKizz, appreciate your feedback!

              Thank you @KevinTreaccar, I miss the red too, maybe I’ll try it in the background to increase the intensity.

              Thank you @Chantal-Goetheer, I completely agree!

              Thank you @Frogpunzel , definitely going to play around with it to sneak a little color in.

              Appreciate everyone’s feedback; love this community ❤️

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              • Nyrryl  Cadiz
                Nyrryl Cadiz SVS OG @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                @Jeremy-Ross i love the redo

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                • Jeremy Ross
                  Jeremy Ross @Nyrryl Cadiz last edited by

                  Thank you @Nyrryl-Cadiz!

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                    • Jeremy Ross
                      Jeremy Ross @Guest last edited by

                      Hi @Stephanie-H, good point. I did think about adding in the big rabbit’s ears to fit it in. You read my mind. I was going for cinematic partial on screen, partially out of screen, but I’ll try both to see how it turns out.

                      Thanks!

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                      • Griffin McPherson
                        Griffin McPherson @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                        @Jeremy-Ross values are much more clear but I think you should still have some color. I love the the foot sticking out to kick the bike but I actually didn’t notice it at first so maybe to make it more clear you could lighten the background behind where the leg is.

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                        • Jeremy Ross
                          Jeremy Ross @Griffin McPherson last edited by

                          Hi @Griffin-McPherson, @Stephanie-H, @KevinTreaccar, @Chantal-Goetheer,

                          What do you think about the 3rd revision with some color and full circle showing big bad bunny ears?

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                          • KevinTreaccar
                            KevinTreaccar @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                            @Jeremy-Ross Love it. Feels just as clear as the original update, and the updated color is definitely adding energy.

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                            • Chantal Goetheer
                              Chantal Goetheer @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                              @Jeremy-Ross Love to see his big bunny ears fully and to see the colour returning! The little dirty leg pops out better this way too. I do wonder how it would look if the bunnies wouldn't have the additional colours they have now? And/or with a slightly brighter more argressive red as in the original version? But it looks great alreay. My mind never stops wondering how would it look like when...

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                                A Former User @Jeremy Ross last edited by

                                @Jeremy-Ross It looks good with the ears all the way in the illustration!

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