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    • Asyas_illos
      Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by

      @AngelinaKizz I don’t think the picture does much for the story besides add interest compositionally, maybe if you could somehow add a like a photo of a new child or an address to the monsters hand or something like that, might be helpful?

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      • AngelinaKizz
        AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

        @Asyas_illos great idea! I had a photo in his hand in one rough, but of the current child and felt like it made the story more confusing, but the reassigned child is a great idea.

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        • Jeremiahbrown
          Jeremiahbrown @AngelinaKizz last edited by

          @AngelinaKizz Love this idea! What if the stuffed animal the child is holding is a stuffed version of the monster? This way the child is literally embracing and accepting his fear and moving on from it leaving the monster to reflect, reminisce, and then ponder what is next?

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          • AngelinaKizz
            AngelinaKizz @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

            @Jeremiahbrown oooh another great idea! Thankyou!

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            • Griffin McPherson
              Griffin McPherson @AngelinaKizz last edited by

              @AngelinaKizz i agree with what others are saying about showing the "new beginning". I was thinking maybe the monster could be holding a piece of paper that reads "new contract" and shows a picture of a different kid who needs scarring. Another thought is maybe give the monster a slight slime so it appears more melancholic rather than just sad. This is a really fun idea, looking forward to updates!

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              • ArtistErin
                ArtistErin last edited by

                I love this idea! Thank you for spurring me in a direction that will help me for this prompt... I've been working on Folktale week so haven't really been thumbnailing anything however really just sort of not coming up with much other than a shipwreck idea.

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                • Kristen Lango
                  Kristen Lango last edited by

                  I like the idea of a character having to move on emotionally because they've reached the end of an era, but I'm not sure that translates into this sketch.

                  My first impression was that I needed to read your caption to understand what was going on in the image.

                  But I think with some refining you could use this same idea and just figure out a way to make it read more clearly in a visual way.

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                  • Kristen Lango
                    Kristen Lango @Jeremiahbrown last edited by

                    @AngelinaKizz ah yes ^ what @Jeremiahbrown said haha that's more constructive than my previous comment

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                    • AngelinaKizz
                      AngelinaKizz @Kristen Lango last edited by

                      @Kristen-Lango no problem! It definitely needs refining to get the story clearer.

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                      • Chantal Goetheer
                        Chantal Goetheer @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                        @AngelinaKizz I meant traveling bag. My autocorrect interferred

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                        • AngelinaKizz
                          AngelinaKizz @Chantal Goetheer last edited by

                          @Chantal-Goetheer oh ok! Sometimes I can’t tell which way the autocorrect took It. He does have a suitcase he’s dragging, but it’s also a very rough sketch 🙂

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                          • kirsten-mcg
                            kirsten-mcg @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                            @AngelinaKizz This is such a fun concept! It kind of has Monsters Inc vibes. I agree with @Chantal-Goetheer about giving the monster a traveling bag, suitcase, etc to indicate it's leaving. Also maybe changing up the pose a little? I think maybe having it standing up instead of sitting might help further the story. Like he's peaking in through the doorway for one last look at his child before he moves onto another.

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                              Ladmireaux last edited by

                              i love this idea so much! great choice!!

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                              • AngelinaKizz
                                AngelinaKizz @kirsten-mcg last edited by

                                @kirsten-mcg thankyou! I'll play with his pose a bit, the idea was him slinking out from under the bed, which may show better when it's rendered, but maybe he needs legs and a sadder slump to his posture.

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                                • AngelinaKizz
                                  AngelinaKizz @Ladmireaux last edited by

                                  @Ladmireaux thanks!

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                                  • AngelinaKizz
                                    AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                    Do you prefer the version where he’s oozing out from under the bed, or where he’s walking away? Walking away would obviously need work because he’s overlapping the kid, and I just cropped and moved him, as I was just trying the different
                                    Pose…

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                                    • Chantal Goetheer
                                      Chantal Goetheer @AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                      @AngelinaKizz the walking comes across stronger, but I like the oozing better because it makes it more obvious it came from under the bed

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                                      • AngelinaKizz
                                        AngelinaKizz last edited by

                                        In doing some rendering I realized how centred the illustration is. Dang.

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                                        How does this set up feel? Is it still clear that he has to move on as his kid is no longer afraid of him?
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                                        • Asyas_illos
                                          Asyas_illos @AngelinaKizz last edited by Asyas_illos

                                          @AngelinaKizz you could try to move the kid to the other end of the bed. The new comp looks good though, too.

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                                          • AngelinaKizz
                                            AngelinaKizz @Asyas_illos last edited by

                                            @Asyas_illos I feel like I’d need a wall for the kid to be at the other end of the bed. I’m kinda digging the new comp, so I’ll try fleshing that out and see if it ends up being better… or I’ll end up in a few totally different direction lol.

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