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    • allysa
      allysa last edited by

      Hello all!
      I’m “done’ with this piece but it just feels a bit flat and boring and uninspired. I feel like something is off with the color palate too. Does anyone have any thoughts on how to improve? Especially the colors/contrast, but anything else too. Thank you!!

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      • Jeremy Ross
        Jeremy Ross @allysa last edited by

        Hi @allysa , I love this piece and your rendering is definitely on the professional level.

        Here are some ideas to add to the piece and bring some life to it.

        1. Add a bird or many birds. I put one for example.
        2. Draw some music notes

        Sorry for terrible drawing, I used my phone and finger for the edits.
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          tom.barrett @allysa last edited by

          @allysa this is a beautiful, wonderfully rendered illustration. The colors are quite harmonious (no pun intended), so not sure that is what needs to change.

          Ask yourself what story you are trying to tell with this piece. Why is the she sitting on a roof? What is the purpose or point of her music, or the horn? How is she able to hold that huge horn up with one hand, and not fall off the roof(!)? What led up to this point, or what happens after this point?

          Once you answer these questions, and perhaps others, you may find that the way to make this less "boring and unispired" is to find it's story.

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          • allysa
            allysa @Jeremy Ross last edited by

            @Jeremy-Ross oh I like that bird idea! Thanks for the draw-over.

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            • allysa
              allysa @tom.barrett last edited by

              @tom-barrett thanks! This seems like wise advice!

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