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    • Russ Van Dine
      Russ Van Dine last edited by

      I think your details are coming along great! I like what Lee has to say about the cropping... can't wait to see this one finished!

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      • Christine Garner
        Christine Garner last edited by

        Personally I never feel like I get past the yukky stage until I'm about an hour from completing a picture. I think you just have to stick with it.
        Sometimes I'll look at it later and think- urghh what have I done though. Difficult thing to answer.

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        • audrey dowling
          audrey dowling @Lee White last edited by audrey dowling

          @Lee-White, I finally have time to reply
          that door and bright light were bothering me too. I had thought about cropping it, but was afraid the composition might be too centered then... like it was in my initial sketch
          or else, I have thought of toning down the focus on the door by making the light softer and showing what's outside that door
          what would you say works best?
          cropped (but not as much as you did)
          0_1464170365735_cup-of-tea2.jpg
          or showing what's outside the door
          0_1464170470161_cup-of-tea1.jpg

          ps: my initial sketch was like this 0_1464170533032_essai 1 value.jpg

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          • audrey dowling
            audrey dowling last edited by

            I think I have a preference for the second solution...

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            • Christine Garner
              Christine Garner last edited by

              This is looking really nice 🙂 I agree the second solution is good.

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              • Lee Holland
                Lee Holland last edited by

                I think they are both strong images. i also like the detail you have put in the door way. well done

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                • Russ Van Dine
                  Russ Van Dine last edited by

                  the detail on the floor and the rug, all awesome... are you going to put any more detail into the mice? I like the one with the door open and the detail outside... maybe you can put an acorn out there on the floor next to the table...

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                  • audrey dowling
                    audrey dowling last edited by

                    thanks! I'll go with the second one then.
                    I think I might soften and warm up the lighting a bit though
                    yes, Russ, I haven't started the mice yet 😉

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                    • MOO
                      MOO SVS OG last edited by

                      There is something about the head on the first one that doesn't sit right. It kind of looks like the head i sattached to the neck wrong-if that makes sense but, since you're using the second one, it doesn't really matter. Both of them are really cute but, I do think the second composition looks better. I really like the colors you've used too. Looks so warm and cozy 🙂

                      Marsha Ottum Owen

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                      • MOO
                        MOO SVS OG @audrey dowling last edited by

                        @audrey-dowling Looks great.

                        Marsha Ottum Owen

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