Circus WIP

Maile McCarthy · 18 Aug 2015, 20:31

Hi Maile,

Great revision. The giraffe looks a lot better and that curve really makes for a nice composition for the whole piece. To me, the ear still doesn't really have the shape of a giraffe's ear, those curvy lines wouldn't be there. I would just make it simpler and maybe make the little "antennae" thicker to be more giraffe-like. Not a big issue.

Thanks Vicky. This kind of feedback is really helpful to me. It's a good reminder of how important it is to understand the anatomically correct way of drawing something before making an abstract departure. I didn't do that here, and I guess it shows!

Maile McCarthy · 18 Aug 2015, 20:31

@Naroth-Cow said:

Good luck! it has turned out very lovely. So much fun, I love those characters and their swag haha.

Thank you

Lee White · 19 Aug 2015, 15:48

Really nice! Love your color and design.

Only thing off for me is the character design of the giraffe. SInce he's gonna be a main focus, he needs to be perfect. IT's mainly his chin and ears that need work. The way they are now give him a sort of "dragon" look. I'd make the chin smaller/thinnner and look at some reference to do a stylized ear that is correct.

Great piece. I'd like to see more from this story. ; )

Maile McCarthy · 20 Aug 2015, 16:29

@Lee-White Thanks Lee (and everyone). It's so helpful to have fresh eyes on my work.

Off to study giraffes...

Maile McCarthy · 20 Aug 2015, 17:19

@Lee-White @Vicky-Vicky

Here it is with a giraffe-ier head. I'm wondering if I might have gone too far toward realism, so that the head doesn't seem to fit the body or the boy's face. What do you think?

Lynn Larson · 20 Aug 2015, 17:32

I think the new head is good! just darken the outlines on the spots to be consistent with the rest of him

Javier Diaz · 20 Aug 2015, 18:04

It's looking good. I would just push the curve the people are on right now. Maybe make it a bit more twisty.
Just a quick paintover.

Maile McCarthy · 20 Aug 2015, 18:14

@Lynn-Larson Thanks Lynn.

Maile McCarthy · 20 Aug 2015, 18:17

@Javier-Diaz Ooh thank you! I love the feel of your curve. I'm going to go work on this now and see how it goes.

Maile McCarthy · 21 Aug 2015, 19:22

@Javier-Diaz Whew! Okay, here's the update. It was not easy for me to push things this much (and even looking at it now, I can see places where I could have pushed more, especially at the girl/cat section). But I think the result is quite an improvement over the original.

Lynn Larson · 21 Aug 2015, 19:23

hehe, love it!!

Maile McCarthy · 21 Aug 2015, 19:24

@Lynn-Larson Thanks

Javier Diaz · 21 Aug 2015, 20:07

@Maile-McCarthy said:

@Javier-Diaz Whew! Okay, here's the update. It was not easy for me to push things this much (and even looking at it now, I can see places where I could have pushed more, especially at the girl/cat section). But I think the result is quite an improvement over the original.

Awesome work!!

Thrace · 21 Aug 2015, 20:15

Such a big difference from where you started. I know you have to feel good about where it is now and all the great advice along the way!

Maile McCarthy · 21 Aug 2015, 20:50

@Javier-Diaz Thank you

Maile McCarthy · 21 Aug 2015, 20:51

@Thrace-Shirley-Mears said:

Such a big difference from where you started. I know you have to feel good about where it is now and all the great advice along the way!

I do! I'm so grateful to be a part of these forums.