WIP Treehouse on abandoned junkyard.

[Dennis Spaans]

@Spencer-Hale Thank you for your comment Spencer! I took it into account during the coloring part. Also my wife didnt like the original story so I altered it using hopeful as the theme. Hope you all like the final result:

There is a bigger version available on my website:dscomics.nl

[Dennis Spaans]

@Dennis-Spaans After some good suggetions by Will Terry on the other thread, I altered the piece. It is not finished yet but I like it already. What do you guys think?

[smithdraws]

@Dennis-Spaans I hate to be contrarian but the little guy feels crowded to the left side. If the focal point was the "tree" house alone then the change would make sense. I do think the perspective updates work. That's my two cents which is about what it's worth

[Leontine]

Super nice to see your process! I agree with @smithdraws, Its very crowded on the left side. The other comp worked better for me. Perhaps you can Punch him up with a bit of light round his silhouette?? One other thing, is it 'treehouse like' enough?

[Dennis Spaans]

Thanks for the comments, they are very helpful! I think I have the best of two worlds now. It was indeed too crowded on the left, and I missed the serenity of my first drawing. But the composition of the 2nd one I liked better, and having the perspective right. Also I like the bumper on the car, so I put that back in haha. I downed the pile on the left, moved Carlos and the lot somehow to the right to create more space. Im not 100% done yet, I need some highlights here and there, but the overal drawing and composition is final. I think... haha

What do you think?

[aska]

@Dennis-Spaans now, it looks perfect

[Dennis Spaans]

@aska thanks!!

[smithdraws]

@Dennis-Spaans The composition on its face is working. I'm still drawn to the serenity of the original but great job man. Alot to be proud of.

[Dennis Spaans]

I think I'm done. I'm gonna let it sink a few days before turning this one in, but I'm quite pleased:

[Doha]

Awesome! Great illustration and story.
I love the original drawing too. Good luck