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    • MirkaH
      MirkaH last edited by

      Hi, I am traveling and only have my iPad pro to work with. I wanted to try Adobe Sketch for the first time, so I did a tree house for this month's prompt.
      Before I turn it in, does anyone have any opinions on how to improve. I don't have access to anything more than iPad and am used to using procreate normally.
      I wish there was a ready airbrush tool, so that I could get softer lights emanating from the tree and fireflies. and i thought it might be fun to have a shovel and rake leaning against the tree, but not sure if thats too much small details.
      As far as process, this is done only using the brushes that came with Adobe Sketch, I didn't download any extras as of yet. The original sketch I did with procreate, I haven't been able to figure out how to lasso areas and size them in Sketch yet.

      0_1497213917257_Treehouse finished.jpg

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      • rcartwright
        rcartwright last edited by

        I like this a lot but maybe the light inside could be warmer more fire like orange this would also play of the blue ski a bit

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        • ambiirae
          ambiirae @MirkaH last edited by

          @MirkaH I really enjoy this concept the only thing that seems odd to me is the tree branch angles. I'm really bad with trees so I have no room to say anything on this just thought I might point it out but over all I really like it!

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          • Chip Valecek
            Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @MirkaH last edited by

            @MirkaH I think it looks good so far. Its also a nice challenge to limit yourself to only a few tools. I would suggest something with the basement view, maybe bring the light down a little and not such a hard black outline. It almost seems like its on the grass vs being inside the grass.


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            • P
              pn last edited by

              @MirkaH
              Hey, you can change the setting of your brushes in Procreate as well and make your own brush. Also there's a lasso tool there, select the part with freehand and then click the select button and with your fingers you can maximise or minimise the size or move the selection. I also use procreate and do it all the time while drawing.

              Btw, the concept is good. You can give more effects to the drawing.

              Good luck!

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              • TessaW
                TessaW last edited by

                Hey, hope you don't mind, I did a quick paint over. I think the scene could be filled out just a bit and the edges of the underground hole treated with a more textured edge.

                0_1497233294429_Untitled-2.png

                The painting overall is really lovely and appealing. Great work.

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                • MirkaH
                  MirkaH @TessaW last edited by

                  @TessW thanks. totally makes sense. Ill work on it again tonight. 🙂

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                  • MirkaH
                    MirkaH last edited by

                    0_1497294918585_FB_IMG_1497294252947.jpg here is some of the changes I made. Not sure if the root in the front looks too forced. I might play around with it a bit more tomorrow night.

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                    • holleywilliamson
                      holleywilliamson SVS OG last edited by

                      My feeling on this one is that it such a centered composition, getting to the boring side, but it is not boring! Maybe you could just crop it so that it is very tall and skinny, zoom in on the part that is really interesting. I don't think you need that much space around the tree. There just isn't as much going on outside of the tree.

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                      • ambiirae
                        ambiirae @MirkaH last edited by ambiirae

                        @MirkaH I think adding one more root on the left might even it out a bit more and help. But the branch on the right hand side looks a lot better! I love the story with this its super cute I also think the outside background adds to the night time feel. So many fun little details I really enjoy!

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                        • MirkaH
                          MirkaH last edited by MirkaH

                          Maed some more changes, to the bottom. Not sure if this image is going to load right. Can I save the image as a jpg from Adobe Sketch or does it always save in png? 0_1497302332727_FB_IMG_1497302207612.jpg

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                          • Laurie
                            Laurie last edited by

                            Fun concept! The different scenes and moments that are taking place in one composition really make it a fun illustration to go into! Turning out wonderful!

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