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      Guilherme Cavalcante last edited by

      You've a great history to tell hahaha Try to make his expressions with more "hurry". You get it? He's in rush to save his friend! Try to make an expression about it

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        Jose Ramos @Guilherme Cavalcante last edited by

        @Guilherme-Cavalcante Hi Guilherme!, Thanks for your comment, yes you´re right about his expression.
        What do you think now?
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          aska last edited by

          looks great! indeed suggested change improved the story 🙂

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            Jose Ramos @aska last edited by

            @aska Thanks Aska!, I´m not sure if the scene is too confuse, cause the tree house has a lot of details, but I think if I will carefully with the contrast between background and character, the scene will look good.

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              aska @Jose Ramos last edited by

              @Jose-Ramos i think contrast will solve your doubts 🙂

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                Jose Ramos last edited by

                What do you think?
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                  Jose Ramos last edited by

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                    Guilherme Cavalcante @Jose Ramos last edited by

                    @Jose-Ramos Hey! I saw the painting version. It's look pretty good. But you could exaggerate more in the expression. Also you could place the sunset in the background and play with the light? Anyway. It's look's nice 🙂

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                      Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Jose Ramos last edited by

                      @Jose-Ramos I was like wow that tree house is so similar to mine, checked my reference photo and it looks like we are using the same reference LOL back to the drawing board for me.


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                      • Doha
                        Doha last edited by

                        Hi Jose,
                        I am loving this design. The composition looks nice and the new expression on his face served the story well.
                        I agree on the illumination note, the source o light is not really clear.
                        Good luck!

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                          Jose Ramos @Chip Valecek last edited by

                          @Chip-Valecek Lol!...I searched in google tree hose , and I found this one:
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                          Is it the same reference that you used? 🙂

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                            Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Jose Ramos last edited by

                            @Jose-Ramos indeed it is. We have some great taste LOL I am actually changing mine anyway, i had a new idea come to me last night before falling asleep. By the way your's looks awesome, great job!


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                              Jose Ramos @Doha last edited by

                              @Doha Hi my friend, Yes I agree about the light, maybe now is better, I´ve made the changes that Guillerme told me.
                              Sunset light and a bit more exagerate the bunny expression.
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                                Jose Ramos @Chip Valecek last edited by

                                @Chip-Valecek hahaha, it was the most cartoon style. 🙂
                                Thanks Chip!

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                                  evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                                  @Jose-Ramos looks good the only thing I see is that you are getting some tangents with the rabbit's ears and the tree house railings. Nice work.

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                                    Jose Ramos @evilrobot last edited by

                                    @evilrobot said in Tree house WIP:

                                    ree house railings. Nice work.

                                    Hey, Thanks a lot...how do you think I can fix it?

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                                    • tombarrettillo
                                      tombarrettillo last edited by

                                      Not sure if anyone has mentioned this, but the treehouse is brighter than the rabbit, which draws me to the treehouse first. Perhaps tone down the light in the doorway and window, and some of the glow on the house, and have a ray of the sunset focused on the rabbit. Also, took me a second to realize the bar dividing the doorway was in fact one of the posts holding up the porch roof. I would move the door opening to be more centered under the roof peak so as to avoid that confusing split.

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                                        Jose Ramos @tombarrettillo last edited by Jose Ramos

                                        @tombarrettillo Hi Tom, yes I agree with your comments.
                                        The treehose is not so bright like before, some glow around the tree and house has been added.
                                        And the sunshine is there too, maybe is it so soft?
                                        I´ve improved the doorway ...what you think? 😉
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                                          tombarrettillo last edited by

                                          Very nice! Light and colors are good. My only pic (and it is a very small one) would be the small bit of light coming thru at the corner of the gray tree.

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                                            smithdraws @Jose Ramos last edited by

                                            @Jose-Ramos What about taking down the tree house and background color saturations about 5 to 10 percent? It would give some atmospheric perspective and help focus attention on the character. Also what if the rabbit's expression was, "determined," rather than scared? Scared seems like he is running away from something. Isn't he actually determined to save his friend? Great job by the way!

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