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    • Jose Ramos
      Jose Ramos @aska last edited by

      @aska Hi Aska, thans for your comment, well, IΒ΄m not sure about red colours, but they do not dislike me either.
      IΒ΄ve tried to change the background color, and make it more late in time...I mean, more night time.
      which do you like more? πŸ˜‰

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      • aska
        aska last edited by

        Still blue ... πŸ™‚ I looked closer at all versions and I think that, what drawns me to the blue version is texture and delicate look. Also Iam not sure of strong reflections on the tree in the last two versions. Perhaps you could tone your colours down a bit, add texture and make the reflections a bit more delicate? Its really a cool picture tho and cam impressed how easily you change rabbit expressions without changing the rabbit itself πŸ™‚

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        • Jose Ramos
          Jose Ramos @aska last edited by

          @aska Hey, thanks for your great advices Aska, the blue version is the last one that I uploaded right?....Thanks a lot!

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          • aska
            aska @Jose Ramos last edited by

            @Jose-Ramos its the first coloured version from 2 days ago (bluish, greenish background)

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            • Jose Ramos
              Jose Ramos @aska last edited by

              @aska Ok, IΒ΄ve added texture, and I think I have 3 options, A,B,C... πŸ˜‰ My favourite is B.

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              • NoWayMe
                NoWayMe @Jose Ramos last edited by NoWayMe

                @Jose-Ramos Wow! This is really progressing well! I vote for B πŸ™‚

                I would suggest adding a little more space between the top of the treehouse and the big branch of the tree in the foreground (maybe that branch could be slightly smaller ?). Right now it feels a little crowded.

                I think the story is funny, but not perfectly clear in your image. Changing his expression helped a lot! I am thinking what if you would add a letter flying in the distance (a ransom letter) It would be like he read the letter, grabbed his bike and left fast to collect acorns and left the letter behind him. It's a little hard to explain! I will try to do a paint over tonight if it's not clear!

                And maybe his worm friend could be sitting on his shoulder ? looking terrorized.

                But I really love where you are taking this πŸ™‚

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                • Leontine
                  Leontine last edited by

                  Lovely comp! Love the colors of all of them. I really like the last one. I have another suggestion, The Rooster with the arrow, I should point him towards the rabbit. Then It draws your eyes inwards, now its pointing towards the branch (out of the illustration) . I think you really don't want to put attention there. A worm friend makes the illustration more fun, Kids love litte jokes or 'easter eggs'. Good luck, your almost there!

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                  • Jose Ramos
                    Jose Ramos last edited by

                    Worm, letter and more space on yhe top πŸ˜‰

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                    • tombarrettillo
                      tombarrettillo last edited by

                      I don't think it needs any texture. Kind of muddies it up a bit, especially the characters

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                      • Chip Valecek
                        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG @Jose Ramos last edited by

                        @Jose-Ramos Love the worm LOL his face is priceless.


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                        • Jose Ramos
                          Jose Ramos last edited by

                          I think youΒ΄re right about the texture Tomb, IΒ΄ve took it out. πŸ˜‰
                          Thanks Chip! πŸ˜‰
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                          • Jose Ramos
                            Jose Ramos @Leontine last edited by

                            @Leontine Thanks Leontine!

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                            • Doha
                              Doha last edited by

                              I think it's perfect!

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                              • Jose Ramos
                                Jose Ramos @Doha last edited by Jose Ramos

                                @Doha Thanks Doha! πŸ˜‰ , and I really appreciate all the comments, they have been very hekpful. πŸ˜‰

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                                • evilrobot
                                  evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                                  Yeah, I think you pulled it off. Looks fantastic.

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                                  • DOTTYP
                                    DOTTYP last edited by

                                    This is a fantastic image, love it!

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                                    • Jose Ramos
                                      Jose Ramos last edited by

                                      Thanks guys!

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                                      • Leontine
                                        Leontine @Jose Ramos last edited by

                                        @Jose-Ramos love the worm!

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