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    Help with another painting, please- Bambi

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    • evilrobot
      evilrobot SVS OG @TessaW last edited by evilrobot

      @tessw for me I liked what you had going in that very first post. But I also like this color comp you have with the brighter colors. I think it actually leans more the comedy end of things with the reds and oranges. Maybe even a shot gun or hunting riffle hanging on the wall over the TV. Could go farther even. He's sitting on bear skin rug. Some kind of pelt draped over the chair.

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      • Jason Bowen
        Jason Bowen SVS OG last edited by

        I think A looks awesome.

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        • ?
          A Former User @TessaW last edited by A Former User

          @tessw Did you try playing with smaller pupils in comp B? To show more of the whites of the eyes? I'm only focused on them because I am reading your composition as such that the main focal point of this piece is the eye connection/exchange between the boy and the ornament? Therefore, we want to make sure we really hit home with that portrayal. What you ultimately decide on is up to you.

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          • MissMarck
            MissMarck last edited by

            I love love love B! I think those colors (combined with the TV) give the effect of "did I really see that" that the boy is probably experiencing. I imagine him turning off the TV and the deer is back to normal... did it really move, or did he imagine it?

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            • MOO
              MOO SVS OG last edited by

              This is awesome! So funny too. I think anything extra is unecessary as it might draw the viewer away from the deer and bunny on the wall, they are important to the piece, of course. It's amazing, Tess!!!! I love that it's a deer and a rabbit on the wall and it cracks me up. Poor Bambi...my nieces used to talk about that all teh time. Their dad was a deer hunter and they never wanted to eat the venison because of the Bambi movie. I'm not sure how kids will view it, depends on the kid I'm sure. I think it's beautifully done!

              Marsha Ottum Owen

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              • MOO
                MOO SVS OG @evilrobot last edited by

                @evilrobot I didn't see the other ones before but, I agree with you that it's less creepy with the colors.

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                • Chip Valecek
                  Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

                  I like B the most. I agree with the mounting of a rabbits head, you wouldn't see that. But you would see a rabbits foot, like a key chain. Maybe have that resting on the floor next to the boy. I love the colors on it, keep it blue. Great piece overall.


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                  • stringfellowart
                    stringfellowart SVS OG last edited by

                    I like B! I like the expression in the eyes, it reads to me like the deer is slightly surprised, but also a little concerned for the boy, like she is worried about the up coming moment of trauma "You okay Kid?" (I have to interject while you can hunt doe during certain times of the year, it is not something a hunter would usually mount as a trophy on the wall. But I think its hilarious anyways.)

                    I would also love to see some more toys/things on the floor. This painting make me want to explore the environment.

                    Also, this make me think of Stranger Things.

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                    • gubhart
                      gubhart last edited by

                      I like the deer in B but I also feel the rabbit gives it a bit more of a humorous feel, certainly made me laugh! Either way it looks amazing.

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                      • Jose Ramos
                        Jose Ramos last edited by

                        I liked your first one concept, but with the deer of B version...maybe if you put the same expresion in the rabbit could be great...more details in the room like tv antenna, blanket on the couch..or a teddy bear on the left sofa.

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                        • TessaW
                          TessaW last edited by TessaW

                          @evilrobot Thanks! I was toying with the idea of a bear skin rug and a gun actually. I'll think about it!

                          @Jason-Bowen Thanks for your input!

                          @harveywalls I will try it out and post it later. Thanks for the eye suggestion. I was playing with the eyes earlier and couldn't get it to look quite right, but your suggestion helped steer me in the right direction.

                          @MissMarck Oooo, that's a cool interpretation!

                          @Marsha-Kay-Ottum-Owen Thank you! Yes, that's the spirit of what I was going for. . . how we humanize animal characters so much and then hunt or eat them. It's strange telling your kid that bacon came from a pig, right after watching a movie with a talking pig in it. 😛

                          @Chip-Valecek Thanks, Chip!

                          @stringfellowart Thank you. I was wondering about the antler thing. I wasn't sure where to go with that since bambi doesn't have antlers and I thought antlers might make it too scary. When I was researching hunting trophies, it looks like some people do have doe trophies, but it is often paired with a buck. What do you think? Would it be better to add antlers? What if the antler's where on the smaller side?

                          @gubhart Thank you. I was hoping that the rabbit would amp up the humor, cause it's sort of ridiculous to mount a rabbit like that, but it seems to turn a lot of people off! 😮

                          @Jose-Ramos Great ideas, thank you!

                          These were kind of my inspirations for the bunny, btw. Aren't they cute, even though it's kind of disturbing?

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                          • Lynda_Percival
                            Lynda_Percival last edited by

                            I love this so much! I really liked your first one with the inclusion of the bunny. I love dark humor, though. I love the deer's expression in "B" and think it would be great on the bunny, too.
                            Mostly I just want to say I love it! The color (colder, creepier tones), the cute/dark/funny combo, all of it. Can't wait to see what you decide.

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                            • tombarrettillo
                              tombarrettillo last edited by

                              without reading everyone's replies, I vote for your first version. The animals need to be as realistic as the boy, and you lose that in the version with the standing rabbit.

                              I would make the ottoman a coffee table with a few nick nacks, or maybe show the parents legs on a couch. I like the antenna or rabbit ears on the TV as someone mentioned. The panelling should continue behind the TV. Maybe a window with late 70's curtains on that wall.

                              Another idea would be to lose the rabbit and have a buck and doe on the wall.

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                              • lmrush
                                lmrush Pro SVS OG last edited by

                                Fantastic painting, I really like the concept. Amazing rendering, my only comments would be to try and have the boy looking up a bit more maybe you could do this with the angel of the ears and I don't think you need the rabbit, but that is just me- fantastic work on rendering and light

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                                • TessaW
                                  TessaW last edited by

                                  @Lynda_Percival Thank you!

                                  @tombarrettillo Thanks for the help, Tom.

                                  @lmrush Thanks! Trying to figure out how to make the head looking up has been challenging without changing how he's sitting. I'll have to play with it and see what I can do.

                                  I'm still not quite done, but I think I need to take a break from this for a few days, cause I'm losing steam!

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                                  • stringfellowart
                                    stringfellowart SVS OG last edited by

                                    I say include the rabbit and leave the deer antler-less, it adds to the dark humor of the illustration.

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                                    • bnewman
                                      bnewman @TessaW last edited by

                                      @tessw This is looking really good. I really enjoyed seeing your process here and the evolution. I had a tv just like this one, and a Nintendo.

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                                      • Jose Ramos
                                        Jose Ramos last edited by

                                        I really like the one with the bunny, and don´t worry for the boy looking up, it´s very clear he´s doing that. 😉
                                        Maybe a little more bright on the gun , and your old poster with the bear behind TV.?

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                                        • Gary Wilkinson
                                          Gary Wilkinson last edited by

                                          His pose is fine, I wouldn't change anything about that. The first image you put up on the post feels quite haunting to me, whereas the last one is quite comical (although the addition of the lightgun is great!). Both are great, but I prefer the scarier version myself 🙂

                                          btw, I really love how you rendered the popcorn

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                                          • ?
                                            A Former User last edited by A Former User

                                            If you still need to... by positioning the ears on the boy (maybe a slightly larger to be seen better) lower on the head from the center it will show that he is looking up (if need be you could always add/emphasize that swirly part of the hair on a boy's head and have that lower from center as well). I see that you've already done those things so maybe play on their emphasis if necessary.
                                            I love the rabbit! Now it is looking a bit more comical and not heavy on the horror.
                                            The deer's ears are great in that position. It gives her that focus and attention towards the boy.
                                            If you still think it needs a touch more feeling of humor or to downscale the scaryness, consider more warmth such as a secondary light source (warm light) maybe coming in from the right as if from another room (kitchen light for example).
                                            Love the popcorn rendering! Love the lighting!
                                            Love how the ottoman is now darker in the foreground. And I love the wood panel walls! I lived through that in more that one house. Yes, and I survived. LOL!
                                            This is looking so good!

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