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    • NoWayMe
      NoWayMe @tombarrettillo last edited by

      @tombarrettillo Good point! I will try that!

      I was also planing on having a picture of her in his locker so that it is clearer who he is hiding from!

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      • RHirsch
        RHirsch @NoWayMe last edited by

        @nowayme Great concept for Fear. I was definitely thinking picture in the locker as well. Maybe you could turn her around so we can see her face better, and make the connection between her and her photo in the locker. Also, maybe she could be talking to those guys, or holding hands with one (because there's nothing worse then having a crush on someone who's dating someone else). Just thoughts...

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        • NoWayMe
          NoWayMe last edited by

          @tombarrettillo Your comment was spot on! I reworked it and I think it's better, what do you think ?

          0_1502554400249_Worst_fear - copie.jpg

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          • tombarrettillo
            tombarrettillo last edited by

            yes, much better! I like the addition of the jock behind her. Look forward to seeing it colored.

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            • Eric Castleman
              Eric Castleman @NoWayMe last edited by

              @nowayme yup, this is a good one.

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              • TessaW
                TessaW last edited by

                The newer version illustrates the concept much better. Great job!

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                • Tyson Ranes
                  Tyson Ranes @NoWayMe last edited by

                  @nowayme on target concept, great work.

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                  • evilrobot
                    evilrobot SVS OG last edited by

                    You have such strong story telling. Great job love this one.

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                    • K
                      Kat SVS OG last edited by

                      Oh yes, the second one really illustrates his fear much better. Great job!

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                      • Chip Valecek
                        Chip Valecek SVS Team SVS OG last edited by

                        ah my son is going through this right now LOL. The new version works really well. You always kill it!


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                        • Laurel Aylesworth
                          Laurel Aylesworth @NoWayMe last edited by

                          @nowayme The heart decorations on the ceiling are an awesome touch.

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                          • bnewman
                            bnewman last edited by

                            Looking really good! Great image. Was definitely one of my worst fears growing up.

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                            • NoWayMe
                              NoWayMe last edited by NoWayMe

                              Thanks everyone! Here is my semi-final sketch. Still have to put in the decorations and finish the pictures in the locker. Critiques are welcome 🙂

                              0_1502732792976_Worst_fear_2.jpg

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                                A Former User @NoWayMe last edited by

                                @nowayme This is great! The interaction between the characters are clear and interesting. My only critique would be of the teen in love. He looks worried but not terrified.

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                                • Jose Ramos
                                  Jose Ramos @NoWayMe last edited by Jose Ramos

                                  @nowayme Great composition, maybe the guys in foreground shoud to be bigger, or at least the head of the left one.

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                                  • DOTTYP
                                    DOTTYP last edited by

                                    Second one much better,I thought the first boy was being bullied (which would be a good fear) Great idea you have come up with.

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                                    • tombarrettillo
                                      tombarrettillo last edited by

                                      looking good. I would open the locker boy's eyes, looking toward the girl (even though he can't see her because of the door; makes the connection better). Also, I would turn both boys' heads in the foreground to the left. I assume the one on the left is looking at the boy in the locker, but his head turned right seems unnatural.

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                                      • DanetteDraws
                                        DanetteDraws @NoWayMe last edited by

                                        @nowayme I love this! The concept is great, and the drawing itself is well done. My only criticism is of the guy spinning the ball on his fingertip. To me he looks like an adult rather than a teenager.
                                        There were so many shy guys in my highschool. In my graduating year, three different guys signed my yearbook confessing they always had a crush on me but were too afraid to say anything. I was like 'awww - I wish you'd said something sooner!' And I was super shy myself, but still I was the one to ask guys to dance with me at school dances. haha The struggle is real. 😉
                                        Anyway - I can't wait to see it finished!

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                                        • NoWayMe
                                          NoWayMe last edited by NoWayMe

                                          This is what I have so far! Critiques are more then welcome 🙂

                                          0_1503886537416_Worst_fear_10.jpg

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                                          • tombarrettillo
                                            tombarrettillo last edited by

                                            Looking good so far! As a graphic design, the small flyer stands out to me. Might make it larger to fill the width of the door, and taller to look more like a poster.

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